Everything Sir Squirrel said was perfectly accurate, the decisions made seem flippant at best and the development of his power manages to seem both unearned and lackluster simultaneously. The problem begins at the very beginning. We are given the illusion that his system-like Sacred Gear offers the choice between certain class sets. This is a mistake because any choice the MC could've made would be met with skepticism from people who wanted something different. But the author made the MC choose the worst possible class, a production class that would put him at the mercy of whoever decides to fund his operation and give him little combat potential returns compared to other ones hypothetically. Now, this could be a moot point for a couple reasons. The author plans on giving the Boosted Gear to the MC. That would eliminate the need for combat potential from a different class. There are also 'permanent boost elixirs' he has already introduced. A roundabout way but still a solid one. But there are other methods to have done this without the disappointing illusion of choice and the odd, undeserved shoehorning of the FMA style alchemy powers. Exhibit A: A Sacred Gear that simply gives him the powers of the world of FMA. The MC would be forced to learn and explore the world he was dropped into from a magi-scientific standpoint in order to shape it accurately, which would be interesting in itself. Being an amped FMA alchemist would allow limitless avenues to transmute himself, increase his combat potential and "spell" arsenal, and create alchemical enhancers, especially the Philosopher's Stone. Exhibit B: Reincarnate a character from FMA:B instead of a random teen. Exhibit C: Make him choose Mage instead and put enchanting and potion brewing as part of that system. Now, I could've handled all the fumbling so far as long as the story is entertaining and the MC rises to the occasion consistently despite this. But the worst part of this story for me is: Slow updates, and SHORT, SHORT chapters. I'm talking barely over a thousand words. Now this is a new story, so there are only 16 chapters to work with right now. But by God, I'm predicting right now that he won't wrap up with Riser's arc until between chapter 30 or 40, and based on that, I'm not sure if I want to stick around for that kind of chapter length.

Yo, i just see you write Dxd fic Here is my advice never write Dxd story by using Dxd anime as reference, Because unlike in light novel, dxd version anime ruin a lot of characters, especially Issei's characters hard to the point that reduce him into fanservice machine.

Mah, your previous fic was actually quite good for all the few mistakes that kept pilling up till it kind of was midway into a crash but, it got real good later on, so Im excited for this. Gonna wait till it builds up a couple of chapies tho,

The story is was pretty good but then the system decided to give him a quest about getting a harem and the vibe of the fanfic just plummeted.

Yet again we do read a copy of dark wolf shiro work. With grayfia being barged and sirzszen being a cuck... I mean, it's not that bad , but when you see it 3 time, doesn't make it smarter... But whatever. So let me get it straight. Last one ended when mc who train and bleed for like hundred chapters can't even compare to issei. With all of his cheating abilities combined. And people do realize how stupid this is... Well guess what, it's exactly how it goes again. MC is weak f, who barks a lot but can't bite. Are you like joking? Maybe you are autistic and only see one way trough a problem and can't choose anything else? Don't know... So yeah, that's just a rewrite with few ideas, and without any potential to live longer. Congratulations! *someone do find Evangelion gif with congratulation, pretty please. No really , how is even possible? Do you know definition of insanity?!

Reveal spoiler

Hello,will Sona and her sister Serafall become his Wifes to.?

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I have enough that story is literally copy paste of your previous one just swap JJK power to FMA:B power. MC is doing exact same decisons like Start doing alchemy ✅ Sell them to fallen angels ✅ Get boosted gear from Issei ✅ Befriend Gremory✅ Make harem out of those 3 fallens ✅ Have people randomly shows up at his home uninvited ✅ Become a devil because basically sis con force it ✅ I officially give up on reading it because I don't see the point and I don't really like the MC personally but if you havent read previous work of autor go ahead it should be decent time waster