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Sir_Squirrle
Sir_SquirrleLv47mth
2024-04-02 23:33

how the heck does this have such a high rating? i mean yeah the writing quality is pretty decent, and the story has potential, but literally just in the first chapter alone there were numerous plot holes and giant leaps in logic, it's like the author was just too lazy to fact-check his fic with avatar source material and wrote the entire base of the plot line on a complete whim with no sound reasoning behind it.

Avatar Legend Of Korra: Two At Once

some_writer
4.4

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BrazillianFox
BrazillianFoxLv4

Finally someone sane,and seriously, the lack of investigation of the story by the author literally makes me skip many paragraphs

7mth
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WebReaderPub
WebReaderPubLv14

Legend of Korra world is set in a period akin to our industrial revolution, but in this fic there are some sci-fi tecnologies like holograms, which doesn't make sense, since a big part of canon is based on the invention of much more basic tecnologies like planes or the first camera. Moreover MC has a part of raava inside of him because his grandfather touched aang during the 100 hundred years. So practically MC has become a second avatar because of that and can bend more elements. I don't like the chenges author did to the story and i never liked the second avatar development either.

7mth

Greenbeem1
Greenbeem1Lv14

Not enough korra fanfics out there and the ones that do exist aren’t finished. Author I checked it other stories and ur reliable. Can’t wait for the rest of the story. Also keep the harem small. Maybe korra and Asami only would be nice

7mth
Random_Entity
Random_EntityLv4

Great! Another Avatar fanfic. Wish there were more Legend of Korra fanfics though.

7mth
AlexCyberHeart
AlexCyberHeartLv2

5/5/3/4/2 mixed up steampunk with sci-fi other then that military operations are rarely as lax as shown so far are borderline incompetent with no backup even if MC did the raid right, improvement is a bit too fast and MC shouldn't know that he can bend other elements even if the way things played out they way described and even if he can it should be extremely hard for him to learn bending outside of fire given it is a small enough piece that nothing was affected while it might help him learn things like lava, lighting and varients I would say that make it so that it would be better to learn fire bending with minor abilities in other elements at best with a boost to variants.

7mth
Hayai_Kami
Hayai_KamiLv3

Its a Great fanfic so far wich means not much at the moment because it only has 2 chapters, but it has a Great and awesome Concept. I Like it and will Watch how it goes. I recommend to give it a try. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update] I Need more chapters!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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Kono_Timoda
Kono_TimodaLv3

Mid It's not complete trash, but the writing style needs to be refined. I can definitely see this getting traction but I don't like how hollow the story feels. Plus it doesn't feel interesting to read 🤷🏽‍♂️ like he's an avatar, big whoop, although it had a nice backstory though. I would say. It's more a 3.9 - 4.2. aka amateur writing.

7mth
shukry_9394
shukry_9394Lv1

Author take sample watch chinese anime fog hill of five elements is you has time is not just watch youtube fight scene that help you writing idea 😎

7mth
hamidking0099
hamidking0099Lv2

Excellent and unique work, good and comprehensive storytelling and balanced power system, the best fanfic available, Avatar with power, keep it up, you're right, Avatar, make the latest windware, and continue the Naruto fanfic.

7mth
Dead_matter
Dead_matterLv4

Don’t listen to the hater enjoy writing “your” story the way u like it btw this is awesome 😎

7mth
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