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breke_Henrique
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2024-03-09 04:17

I found the protagonist's personality very pleasant, he is smart and developing, he makes mistakes and learns from them, something I didn't like was the evaluation magic, it was not given by the system to reveal so much information, and I think it should Take away the HP system, this doesn't work in real life unless he gets stabbed in the head he can have 100000 HP and he dies instantly. (there may be some errors because it was on Google Translate)

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BeixuanLovell
BeixuanLovellAuthor

Thank you for the review. I gave him the inspection magic because it would really help him get out of trouble (I know I'm the one creating the problems he faces, but it would be too convoluted for him to understand many things without that help). But I understand your dislike. As for the HP system, I haven't delved too deeply into it yet; I have some things planned, but if it's too much trouble for me, then I'll see about discarding it.

breke_Henrique
breke_HenriqueLv1

I don't really like the system with HP because it seems like the MC's life has become a game, it doesn't matter if he loses an arm it grows back as soon as his HP returns or if he takes a hit from a strong opponent who grazed him takes about 100 damage

BeixuanLovell: Thank you for the review. I gave him the inspection magic because it would really help him get out of trouble (I know I'm the one creating the problems he faces, but it would be too convoluted for him to understand many things without that help). But I understand your dislike. As for the HP system, I haven't delved too deeply into it yet; I have some things planned, but if it's too much trouble for me, then I'll see about discarding it.
breke_Henrique
breke_HenriqueLv1

but I liked that he doesn't have a mission or level, and all his attributes were obtained by training and not through system points or a store that gets items out of nowhere.

breke_Henrique:I don't really like the system with HP because it seems like the MC's life has become a game, it doesn't matter if he loses an arm it grows back as soon as his HP returns or if he takes a hit from a strong opponent who grazed him takes about 100 damage
BeixuanLovell
BeixuanLovellAuthor

That's a huge simplification of HP's system, like I said, I haven't delved into it much, but it's not that absurd.

breke_Henrique:I don't really like the system with HP because it seems like the MC's life has become a game, it doesn't matter if he loses an arm it grows back as soon as his HP returns or if he takes a hit from a strong opponent who grazed him takes about 100 damage
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