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Jacob_Winkler
Jacob_WinklerLv156mth
2024-10-29 03:39

so far I like it it has a lot of potential could definitely see it being a top 20 on web novel. I have read it to chapter 23 I believe and there is no harem or smut yet. like other reviews have said lost sight of the original main villain again I'm only at chapter 23 so I don't know if that changes the MC is wealthy and Rich after getting over 5 million credits but still chooses to work and being a subservient position with a boss. what is the point of making a wealthy MC if he doesn't show the wealth in any way at all. again don't know if that changes. I rated writing quality as a two mostly because there is a lot of mistakes one to two every paragraph on average. they're not too bad it's just the volume of them is crazy. story development is 2 Stars for now because of again a lot of things inconsistencies I pointed out. like the villain in the beginning not being mentioned again and not going back to his hometown leaving his family behind just forgetting about them even though that was his reason for fighting so hard to live he just left them. that is an inconsistency major one considering that was his only motivator to stay alive. again I'm only on chapter 23 I don't know if this changes later. another major thing is the short chapters. I mean they're not too bad but they're the shortest I've seen on web novel and I've read hundreds even thousands of novels on here. and I believe these are among the shortest if not the shortest chapters. in conclusion great potential the story development line is a good one but the writing quality story development and character design need major improvements. but I could definitely see this again being even top 10 on web novel

My New Eyes Can See Through Clothes

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Thank you very much! I'll keep working hard to improve, ensuring that each part of the story brings you an even better experience. I hope you enjoy every moment!

6mth
Other Reviews
Zabne123
Zabne123Lv15

I've read 55 and it has some really good potential but the Mc needs some honest work. I also don't see where this story is going. The story lost sight of the first villain. The Mc for me is too passive when it comes to dealing with people. He seems smart but no real goals are shown yet. I feel this needs some work. Like I said it's has potential to go far. The first 20 chapters really pulled me in.

7mth

Alanray64
Alanray64Lv15

I just finished 55 chapters and nothing has caught my interest to this point. The initial chapters had me intrigued, losing sight, regaining sight and a hint of being the chosen. Yet from there it just dipped down to mediocrity. The MC is pretty sad, guessing low EQ and lacking of anything defining a protagonist. Gifted this divine skill, he decides to share a house, yeh not asking who the room mates are was a pretty rookie move but he really did not need to share accomodation as he could easily rent a single room apartment with his earnings. I imagine the author decided this was the best way he could meet some women, who knows, but from this was seen that the MC was stuck in his ways and knows no better, chance to change practically zero. One thing that irked me was that he did nothing to find out where the person who ordered his sight taken away was or to ensure he was safe fro. Being traced etc. just many lost opportunities. The story has potential but the delivery of this just got lost on the way. Read the first 55 chapters and put it down to experience.

7mth
Drigok_Yuri_Is_NTR
Drigok_Yuri_Is_NTRLv15

This is not a proper review will write one if this novel is for me, just got a question. Will be any yuri in the harem not a fan. That also means light yuri with the mc in threesome etc?

6mth
Z0d_
Z0d_Lv4

It was promising until the MC got his new apartment. To sum it up, his life almost gets ruined by two girls, and the next day he takes them out to eat and is all buddy buddy. Simp and beta MC.

7mth
Nachtregen
NachtregenLv14

I have read this one once… so it got a new edit?

7mth
Zarion116
Zarion116Lv15

Needs reviews but I’ll rate to help. Please keep writing

7mth
Jaywxrld
JaywxrldLv4

this give me those manhwa or manhua (don't know the difference yet forgive me) Vibes with too much face slapping

4mth
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