Let's start with the positive things, well enough written to be able to follow the thread easily. The Hindu setting makes the story different. The premise of the synopsis is good and helps me want to see what the story is about. In general it can work, I would recommend being careful with the size of the chapters, the first one seemed excessively long to me and may cause many readers to not fit it well. Be careful in the first chapters with the issue of language, especially references to violations, it is something that can make the verification process difficult, or even obtaining a contract later. Likewise, a prologue, or some type of parallel information would be nice, Hinduism is a complex religion and unless you have a medium-high cultural level, for many readers it can be disconcerting. I wish you luck with the novel
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