Let's start with the positive things, well enough written to be able to follow the thread easily. The Hindu setting makes the story different. The premise of the synopsis is good and helps me want to see what the story is about. In general it can work, I would recommend being careful with the size of the chapters, the first one seemed excessively long to me and may cause many readers to not fit it well. Be careful in the first chapters with the issue of language, especially references to violations, it is something that can make the verification process difficult, or even obtaining a contract later. Likewise, a prologue, or some type of parallel information would be nice, Hinduism is a complex religion and unless you have a medium-high cultural level, for many readers it can be disconcerting. I wish you luck with the novel

This platform is so full of random but look-alike stories that I feel fed up most of the time. However, this was a rare find. Truly, this is a piece of literary art. No doubt. The beginning was super mature, with questions to draw the attention of the readers to the central point of the story—a dystopian life where everything feels disgusting, old, filthy, and unholy. It's a psychological story. I get a touch of Metamorphosis and Ulysses in this work. There is also an Aku-no-hana manga vibe. The story brings to light a series of questions and events that make the readers question their own lives. It rocks the peaceful world of people who are seemingly oblivious to the hardships of the people in the world. The nothingness, emptiness, and absurdity of life come right out! This is a treat—an amazing work of art. I will be waiting for more chapters. Cheers, sensei!!

I love this! Dark themes, psychological mind games, and questions that can pull your worst doubts out of your filthy mind~ If you are ready for some dark ride while finding quite interesting answers about your existence, check this out... But I warn you... It might give you goosebumps~

Not much fan of scary stories but your story got me really intrigued. Keep uploading more chapter to attract other readers. Your book really has so much potential shown in the first 3 chapter.

The story provides an intriguing synopsis, introducing concepts such as Mantras, Bodhisattvas, and superhuman abilities. The character of Kanzaki Hachiro is also given a unique struggle, setting the stage for interesting character development. However, it could benefit from further development and clarification of the world background. Overall, a promising story with potential for compelling plot and characters.

A dark vibe going on. But yeah, I really like your style. The first chapter was a bit long though. Normally those should have been two chapters, at least by webnovel standards. Anyway, keep up the good work.

This is the first time I read a dark themed book like. The sanskrit terms. I loved it as an Indian myself. Keep up the great work.

First starts this very moody feeling that just gets you in an odd way, once that I didn't expect to exactly feel. It's weird. Super weird, and I love it.

This novel successfully establishes a dark and dreadful atmosphere from the first 3 chapters. The author creates a chilling sense of unease through their writing, even if the core of the dark-themed genre is explicitly described instead of left to the reader's imagination. The pacing feels solid! balancing suspenseful build-up with bursts of revealing action. Characters appear well-rounded with motivations that remain grounded in their reality, adding complexity to their reactions in the face of terrifying events. The world-building is very interesting, and while the overall consistency could be tightened, this novel is very promising in terms of storytelling. This novel seems like a worthwhile read for fans who enjoy dark themes and explicitly described horror situations. Keep up the great work Author!