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ApoloJackson
ApoloJacksonLv19mth
2024-03-19 18:10

The biggest problem with this story is the MC. 10 years of training, 10 years, and he remains the same empty, hollow shell. And it's not a matter of waiting for chapters, it's logic. If you wanted to keep the MC like a potato and develop it little by little, there would be no point in doing this training during this time. It's torturous to read how he walks and acts even though he's that age, that training, and his "ability."

One Piece: The Strongest Swordsman

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3.5
69 Chs

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ApoloJackson
ApoloJacksonLv1

And it also has the romance, Ecchi and harem tags... Really? This will only happen if you do like Oda and pile up about 1k chapters. At this point it is easier for Luffy to form a harem and for Issei to stop liking women.

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Mamamesta
MamamestaLv3

Chopper also has a better chance of getting his harem as a woman from the mink tribe ๐Ÿ˜†

ApoloJackson:And it also has the romance, Ecchi and harem tags... Really? This will only happen if you do like Oda and pile up about 1k chapters. At this point it is easier for Luffy to form a harem and for Issei to stop liking women.
9mth
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PRIMORDIAL_09
PRIMORDIAL_09Lv4

it will be more like everyone : marry me! mc: nods! ๐Ÿ˜‚

9mth
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Oji_san_ecchi
Oji_san_ecchiLv4

Your novel is weird. It's like telling a story of a mother who doesn't like hurting living beings. In the world of One Piece, having such a nature is not good, you stupid writer. A bad novel with other silly MC traits.

9mth

Carlos_4054
Carlos_4054Lv1

A clear example of how to ruin a fanfiction in 2 chapters, amazing[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

9mth
Dark_PersonJJ
Dark_PersonJJLv4

I just want to know who will be in his Harem?Nami?

10mth
Mamamesta
MamamestaLv3

An author's recommendation: dedicate more time to this fic that can still be saved than to the others because the protagonist of this story seems more like a secondary character than the Mc [img=fp][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

9mth
Huevo_derecho
Huevo_derechoLv1

There's not much to say about this fic, it's very bad, a very slow story and so out of logic, a boring, empty and clunky protagonist that the only thing I manage to awaken in me is an incredible boredom I don't understand how anyone can like a protagonist who doesn't show any emotion and all he does is nod and act like a fool

9mth
Bull_7777
Bull_7777Lv1

A naรฏve, boring, silly and weak protagonist, if he hadn't had that 10-year training with the Dark King, the story that the author wants to interpret would be more believable, but unfortunately it's not like that [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

9mth
Aspecto
AspectoLv13

This fan fic is not worth wasting your time. This is prolly gonna be dropped soon and author is not consistent at all. The character design is good but doesn't suit the theme at all.

9mth
Jhon_4525
Jhon_4525Lv1

In the last few chapters, the supposed 10-year training with the Dark King himself went to waste [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

9mth
6_SHINIGAMI_9
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SHAMELESS REVIEW FROM ME๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽŠ

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