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md_rizvi
md_rizviLv44mth
2024-09-11 21:01

Read my thoughts..... Mc is 14 at the beginning of the story.... and yet for some unknown reason he is cautious and smart.. somewhat like he is not from a city of miner... He also started hiding his powers and abilities for some unknown reason (Well he did say that he didn't want to become the target of others envy... but the thing is... how does a 14 year old kid know all this, like did he read some kind of novel or stories, or is he from earth? well Author didn't say anything about it... it's like he is smart and has knowledge for some unknown reason)

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ShominSenpai
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would you like to read my novel symbiogen ?

Aoki_Aku
Aoki_AkuAuthor

Shomin, you’re on your last warning before your account and ID is banned for spam. You’re over five hundred spam reports now. Be smart or you’ll be gone.

ShominSenpai:would you like to read my novel symbiogen ?
md_rizvi
md_rizviLv4

Nah... but I will throw some stones🤔

ShominSenpai:would you like to read my novel symbiogen ?
ShominSenpai
ShominSenpaiLv2

or some bricks

md_rizvi:Nah... but I will throw some stones🤔
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