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NitrogenousBeing
NitrogenousBeingLv148mth
2024-05-20 01:01

I was expecting more. The story isn't progressing in an exciting direction so far. The MC has too few challenging obsticles in his path for the theme. The drive behind the main character is very tacky. I find the MC’s interactions with the main antagonists to be immature and cringeworthy(maybe it should be like that if he's an inexperienced kid, but I don't like the time-hardened system acting like that). The intrinsic logic behind the narration is often immature. There is a lot of rushing through infodump after infodump, which leaves events and characters of the story feeling trivial and impersonal. In many scenes, the writing style lacks sufficient description and immersiveness. Don't get it wrong, it’s not a terrible read, just not great. To sum it up, it's readable and feels original, but it could and should be so much better.

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Elyon
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finish the first volume and you will understand.

NitrogenousBeing
NitrogenousBeingLv14

Yeah I feel like it’s conflicted between trying to get somewhere fast and giving the whole story. Perhaps I’ll enjoy it more when I get there. Thanks for the signpost.

Elyon:finish the first volume and you will understand.
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