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harrisdavidwilliam
harrisdavidwilliamLv41yr
2024-04-10 22:57

it is readable, but the problem is the name of the spell and the name if the magical animals are wrong, like the invisible animal, its seems like its a demiguise, also the transformation magic, the right one is transfiguration, also the phantasm shift isnt it apparition, he even named an acramantula spider as an eight eyed giant spider, even some of the magical plant named are wrong

HP: Bad Intentions

Max1mus
4.0
443 Chs

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Max1mus
Max1musAuthor

Hey guys, Max1mus here! Here is my shameless Author Review. I have tried my best to enhance the reader experience of this translation work. Hope you have a good time reading it. If you do or don't leave a review either way. Also if you have questions about the novel you could comment under this review and I will gladly answer.

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R0B
R0BLv2

Good fanfic, but bad translation. Don't get me wrong, the translation and grammar is understandable. The problem is that this fanfic use vague words for names, skills, items and etc. For example "invisible monster"... Even now I have no clue what kind of monster is that... Just give it a name... The same problem happens everytime some sort of name is used...

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larkin_klarkin
larkin_klarkinLv4

Reveal spoiler

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Bouncy_Beast
Bouncy_BeastLv4

first word of the first chapter is "Summon the guardian" and two sentences after that theres a "staff" not then a spell called "Phantom transportation" lol. if you don't see the problem let me help you, they are the translator's synonyms for "Expecto patronum, wand, and apparition". at least try to read what you are uploading author.

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Sidecharacter1
Sidecharacter1Lv14

Currently in the third chapter. I am the first reviewer besides the Author. Great work so far. I hope it stays like that. Keep it up Author-San! Also if you like Naruto you could check my fanfic Naruto: Mixed Heritage

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faesr
faesrLv14

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Acuario
AcuarioLv5

Jajajaajaajajj,Esa sipnosis me gano,ojalá la historia sea igual de buena ............................. ................................... ..... ........

1yr
jakom
jakomLv12

Aah yes. I've just read the first five chapters Nd I already want more

1yr
Herbivore
HerbivoreLv2

I love that story, that can become a master class for sure ! I really want to read more Haha !

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