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Haizao
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2024-01-20 06:52

9 Chapters in and there's some good potential here. Characterization is strong and the situation unfolds understandably well and within a logical set of goals. Actions can be a bit confusing at times but nothing a solid editing session won't fix. Writing quality is the biggest detractor for me, and can use a good editing pass for clarity and polish. There was a lot of emphasis on Show but too little Tell for me to entirely understand what the situation of the world was. That said, it's also pretty early into the plot so establishing the characters is clearly where the author is at as of this review. Keep up the good work!

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