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"Hello readers, this is my first time writing a fanfiction so the writing might not be great. If you notice something that is wrong with the writing, please inform me. I hope that by reading your comments, my writing will get better. Thank you."

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It is a good first few chapters. The only thing I'm complaining about is whether the characters are either thinking or talking. I couldn't move past the first 2 chapters because of it. The premise is good, but please fix it (I'll delete this comment and review after the author fixes it).

If your wondering if you should read this, it’s a no from me mc is supposedly op to all heck but gets sidelined by hajime the entire story and the mc legit does nothing like if he wasn’t there nothing would change that plus the fact author has a hard on for hajime and gives him all the girls minus shizuka (who I wouldn’t be suprised goes with him too) the writing quality is abysmal and the entire story is told as if someone is writing it down rather than experiencing it 0/10 would not recommend (p.s. I read this on my alt account that’s why it says I have chapters read)

Trash, mc with no thought of his own, acts like a pet, and a background character, trash, trash, trashtrash, trash, trashtrash, trash, trashtrash, trash, trashtrash, trash, trashtrash, trash, trashtrash, trash, trash

Great work ヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)oヾ(≧▽≦*)o.

It's rare to see Arifureta fanfics, and so far there are 2 heroines, but please don't overdo it, so far it's very exciting, but the grammar is very messy, sometimes the quotation marks ("") disappear, and the conversation between two people blends together, like people A and B chatting, usually limited by quotation marks, and different paragraphs, but sometimes they come together, but I'm used to it because I read MTL novels and updates please more often ch19

Author, your ff is very good. I wish you would publish it every day so we could read this beautiful story. Of course we can't force you. So we'll make do with what we have!

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