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zes13
zes13Lv1111mth
2024-05-16 06:13

Yeah no.. I thought this would be a dark story but yikes, chessy lines, amateurish writing. I felt like i was reading a diary of a 15 year old with some fantasy elements. Main character is beyond edgy and dialogues are out of the place.

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Entrail_JI
Entrail_JIAuthor

Thank you for your honesty!

Velstad
VelstadLv13

I can somewhat understand the cheesy part (even thought I don't agree) but the amateur writing is insane to say, the author's writing is top notch

zes13
zes13Lv11

No.

Velstad:I can somewhat understand the cheesy part (even thought I don't agree) but the amateur writing is insane to say, the author's writing is top notch
Dexter_Sled_1111
Dexter_Sled_1111Lv13

Okay.

zes13:No.
The_Envious_One
The_Envious_OneLv14

Up to chapter 1 is crazy

Darnelljoe
DarnelljoeLv14

Top notch for webnovel perhaps

Velstad:I can somewhat understand the cheesy part (even thought I don't agree) but the amateur writing is insane to say, the author's writing is top notch
zes13
zes13Lv11

I would probably feel much more comfortable, being honest with authors who have terrible writing skills, i think honesty is the most important thing especially if you are an author, because without it you can't improve. It's like the mother who says to her ugly kids that they are beautiful and handsome, etc. .

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Kw0z
Kw0zLv14

You’re not punching anyone in the face even in real life lmao. Internet gangster

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Kw0z
Kw0zLv14

Cringe

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zes13
zes13Lv11

i did not give advice, i just gave the cold hard facts.

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Shad_dow
Shad_dowLv3

bro has no taste

zes13
zes13Lv11

My friend, if you like this *webnovel* even in the slightest bit, I am sorry, but you are the one with no taste. I can even guess that most fans of this novel are probably below 17 or 18.

Shad_dow:bro has no taste
Reprobate
ReprobateLv4

lmfao. yeah, although I "kind of" like this novel, but just because someone doesn't like the same stuff as you don't mean they have bad taste.

zes13:My friend, if you like this *webnovel* even in the slightest bit, I am sorry, but you are the one with no taste. I can even guess that most fans of this novel are probably below 17 or 18.
zes13
zes13Lv11

People's tastes may differ across different genres, but when it comes to writing quality, it's a skill issue if you can't see it, not taste. I'm not even shaming the story itself, even if it's a cliche that's been written thousands of times by other mediocre writers. My critique is purely focused on the quality of the writing.

Reprobate:lmfao. yeah, although I "kind of" like this novel, but just because someone doesn't like the same stuff as you don't mean they have bad taste.
Reprobate
ReprobateLv4

Very true. (I was agreeing with you btw)

zes13:People's tastes may differ across different genres, but when it comes to writing quality, it's a skill issue if you can't see it, not taste. I'm not even shaming the story itself, even if it's a cliche that's been written thousands of times by other mediocre writers. My critique is purely focused on the quality of the writing.
Shad_dow
Shad_dowLv3

hey it's okey to have poor taste! you don't need to worry about it enjoy yourself

zes13:My friend, if you like this *webnovel* even in the slightest bit, I am sorry, but you are the one with no taste. I can even guess that most fans of this novel are probably below 17 or 18.
Blah_Blah_7463
Blah_Blah_7463Lv3

cant fault you for the first comment, that was criticism, but now you're just being a dick. you're not here for life changing fiction, you're on webnovel, it is not known for having the peak of literature. don't act as if your taste is some grand objective thing when you are on a website literally known for its copy and paste novels. don't be so arrogant when you're on here, your opinion matters just as much as everyone elses.

zes13:My friend, if you like this *webnovel* even in the slightest bit, I am sorry, but you are the one with no taste. I can even guess that most fans of this novel are probably below 17 or 18.
zes13
zes13Lv11

well, it wasnt me who insulted a random person on internet whom i know nothing about lol what a prick

Blah_Blah_7463:cant fault you for the first comment, that was criticism, but now you're just being a dick. you're not here for life changing fiction, you're on webnovel, it is not known for having the peak of literature. don't act as if your taste is some grand objective thing when you are on a website literally known for its copy and paste novels. don't be so arrogant when you're on here, your opinion matters just as much as everyone elses.
MutumUnum
MutumUnumLv1

I do reckon the writing can get slightly cheesy, but to say the writings amateur?

MutumUnum
MutumUnumLv1

Sir, why are you still responding to sub comments '10 months after', this isn't Reddit.

zes13:well, it wasnt me who insulted a random person on internet whom i know nothing about lol what a prick
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