Two individuals mentioning fixing or editing the first few chapters? Time to clear this up. I can bet that the first few chapters need no editing at all. If you've seen any mistake, trust me, I've seen it already already. For example in chapter 1, Max is supposed to say "Ya" in his first sentence but instead, I allowed him to say "You" to show every reader that I'm also a human and mistakes are inevitable. Before publishing the first chapters, and still before publishing any new chapter, I reread them until I'm bored of doing it. What you think needs editing is definitely associated with how the MC, Max, utters many of his words. Call it his flaw, a flaw that would be explained in maybe around chapter 45-50 as for why he has it. Again, the way Max speaks needs nothing like editing; it is meant to be like that for a reason. Apart from that, something you might think needs editing can be my style of writing. It doesn't need editing as well. It is different, it is new, and developing like how any other skill develops with time. You'll know the difference if you are simply to check how I wrote chapter 16 (the latest chapter at the moment). Thank you for your review.

Harem?

I figured that was the case hahaha and the way the mc peaks reminds me of Heiji Hattori of detective conan