great to see a good story about riser Phenex.awesome cover art too

It's a good fanfiction so far, I can't wait to see how the plot will continue.

I love the whole Reincarnated As Riser Phenex trope, but this fanfic has 3 issues: - The characters and dialogue are too robotic and monotonous. This makes the characters look less realistic, and makes their whole personality revolve over Riser. - Because of the first point the romance in the novel is less heartwarming. - Unnecessary Killing. I don't mind killing but the MC in this story was a straight up murder hobo, killing people when there were better ways of dealing with them. A good example of this was the human witch used to track down Asia. Instead of killing her to hide information, a better way would be using mind erasing magic(all devils know it). Realistically her disappearance would only bring him more attention.

dude, your story is good, but the text looks like generated AI, I advise you to revive it and diversify it, and try to avoid monotony and tautology

writing quality is bad it doesn't sound human way to robotic. story development feels quite forced and unnatural. i wish the author the best in their future endeavors

Very interesting, hope you don’t need him up to fast

I didn't really like the protagonist, I thought he did a lot of unnecessary things and I also don't like super chaotic things, I'm not complaining about him killing people, mostly unnecessarily, I like chaotic protagonists but I also like intelligent protagonists, chaotic but intelligent protagonists, no matter how much they change the plot or things like that, they are always in control and a lot of the time they let the plot unfold to get the most benefits or changes the plot to results that he predicted and that won't affect the world much, or turns the world upside down by doing crazy things and in the midst of the chaos he benefits, I think the best example I have and the protagonist of annihilation maker the crazy things he did always benefited him as much as possible. Other than that, I thought the story was great with good grammar and few holes in the script.

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There are flaws but I like this.Sometimes it does feel rushed but it's just beginning so I hope you improve as you write more.I suggest something from cultivation Novels too can make interesting like that Phenix bloodline from ATG is a good one to have.I don't know how it works though as I am not a fan of those "I ,your father" type novels.Also show some conversation with his family and peerage members and not make people think it's a diary.We have to speculate some so show his wholesome moments with family too.This way even if you are villain we can see his motives as sometimes Villains are more complex than hero and make him more scheming like Aizen.No need to just brute force on his enemies.He can Humiliate Issei more like he can also talk to Gremory family or phoenix family about Issei behavior or do something more drastic but orchestrate it like why a Grafiya only interferes only when Riser is about to do something but Issei can shout whenever he wants ..I mean there are some places you just skipped over