isaiah_Bissue

just honest criticism if you would; dude, you're writing a story... no, correction, you're telling a story, I like the fact that you used this method in your introduction, though👍✊️, not reporting a journalistic finding. You're choice of wording makes the imagined environment feel stiff. Try a more...teens friendly/young adult approach. They are your presumed major audience anyway.

that would be a 'nice'way to reveal your weaknesses. dude, seriously 😐. ah, well. perhaps I like an interesting one-sided beatdown too much

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Thank you! 😊

R3boot's advice is quite good too

ice?

WhAT If I WAnt ThEm T O!?

yeah. that seriously ruined eroninja

thank you fir your humble sacrifice poison tester. You shall never be forgotten