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HellOfTiamat
HellOfTiamatLv141yr
2023-12-29 22:46

The premise and idea are good, but the grammar needs improvement. Consider using an AI to enhance readability.

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Beginnerghost04
3.2
24 Chs

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Beginnerghost04
Beginnerghost04Author

I am using but most of them are premium and by translating bi by bit takes time, and I am just a college student, bro.

1yr
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HellOfTiamat
HellOfTiamatLv14

I’m still reading it, and my intention wasn’t to convey negativity. I apologize if my review seemed negative. It’s okay if you use Google Translate but I suggest running it through ChatGPT afterward; to my knowledge, that AI is free. I’ve used it extensively to correct my grammar and sentence structures without spending a single penny. Best of luck with your fic!

Beginnerghost04:I am using but most of them are premium and by translating bi by bit takes time, and I am just a college student, bro.
1yr
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Beginnerghost04
Beginnerghost04Author

I am just saying it, not blaming you, bro.

HellOfTiamat:I’m still reading it, and my intention wasn’t to convey negativity. I apologize if my review seemed negative. It’s okay if you use Google Translate but I suggest running it through ChatGPT afterward; to my knowledge, that AI is free. I’ve used it extensively to correct my grammar and sentence structures without spending a single penny. Best of luck with your fic!
1yr
Nyxio
NyxioLv11

Please don’t use ai, it becomes blatantly obvious when AI is used and it turns the writing very generic and boring with unnecessary emotions inserted by essentially a mindless program.

Beginnerghost04:I am using but most of them are premium and by translating bi by bit takes time, and I am just a college student, bro.
1yr
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Beginnerghost04
Beginnerghost04Author

I will try.

Nyxio:Please don’t use ai, it becomes blatantly obvious when AI is used and it turns the writing very generic and boring with unnecessary emotions inserted by essentially a mindless program.
1yr
That_Annoying_guy
That_Annoying_guyLv4

Is this single fl or harem author?

Beginnerghost04:I am just saying it, not blaming you, bro.
1yr
Beginnerghost04
Beginnerghost04Author

I myself don't know. I am just writing and writing.

That_Annoying_guy:Is this single fl or harem author?
1yr
That_Annoying_guy
That_Annoying_guyLv4

Tell me when you decide

Beginnerghost04:I myself don't know. I am just writing and writing.
1yr
Beginnerghost04
Beginnerghost04Author

The moment, I sit on a chair, when I decide to write a chapter for today.

That_Annoying_guy:Tell me when you decide
1yr
Willy_Peters_3858
Willy_Peters_3858Lv12

to confusing

1mth
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SUBSCRIBE_MY_LISTLv5

The concept is great. The Dialogue bad. The Formatting and Grammer worse. The MC is not likeable at all, he comes across as a manipulative, abusive, opportunistic rat who uses people. Somehow that works in him landing Susan Storm as a girlfriend... the author explains thisnas her being an INFJ of all MBTI typings, whilst the portrayal shown of her is extraverted, and she keeps seeking him out when she should be calling the cops on him. The MC is apparently indian and pretty much acts like all the bad things about india packaged into a behavioural package. By chapter 5, he has an emo outburst again, after a very short subpar action scene that I only realised after the fact happened. I liked the initial concept of the story but its like an indian wuxia story in all the worst ways. Still, it can be an enjoyable read for people who are into this sort of thing. I rated it by wn standards, not my own like or dislike for the story, as the MCs personality and behaviour would have pretty much made a score in the positive impossible otherwise. The mc makes me want to call a pest exterminator on him.

1yr

Bryce_Bergeron
Bryce_BergeronLv15

It is incredibly hard to read and understand neat concept needs alottttt of work tho keep it up practice makes perfect my friend :)

1yr
DaoistojZfIq
DaoistojZfIqLv14

honestly, author, you have a good idea, but this story is a mess. You should rewrite it using this one a rough draft with readers pointing out problems to fix on the rewrite version

1yr
Bilal_Arshad
Bilal_ArshadLv4

Reveal spoiler

1yr
anime_otaku_6087
anime_otaku_6087Lv13

I really like the dialogue in this novel and I got hooked right from the start. I hope this novel continues like this.

1yr
Shanksxx
ShanksxxLv14

interesting, I hope you continue to write a novel and keep the flow of one chapter a day, I wish you success and I will follow your journey as much as possible.

1yr
Talksalot
TalksalotLv4

Reveal spoiler

1yr
behem0th
behem0thLv6

the premise of the story is interesting and so far the developments pretty good but for the grammar and spelling... I've read raws and mtls with better sentence structure

1yr
Jploui93
Jploui93Lv4

I literally couldn't get pass half of ch 1, the grammar is horrendous and even worse than the Chinese novels I've tried reading. And I don't know why, but every time the Mc is Chinese or Indian they are some of the most hateful towards people of other races, and I'm getting that vibe from the comments I've been reading. Not just a no, but a hell no from me

7mth
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