Review Detail of Black_H34rt in Genis Manifestation
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This is disappointing… The story feels like you are just writing what comes to mind and trying to force relationship especially between Kalie and his sister…. It’s a jumbled mess at least to “Pentagram school”, that’s where i stopped and did I mention Cringe? It’s so cringe What kind of relationship are you trying to make out between kalie and his “Family”? I don’t know man, might seem biased but I’m not into Cringe
Genis Manifestation
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When i say the relationship is being forced, i mean the way the two of them are relating to each other considering the fact they are siblings(albeit step siblings) just doesn’t work the way you’re putting it. You might argue this is a fantasy genre but I’ll tell you fantasy or not, it doesn’t require throwing away common sense afterall who would read a novel with no common sense or a jumbled and messed up common sense only someone with a jumbled brain would… The novel’s okay(save for the mysteries, i hate ‘em) My previous review was about me not wanting to read a story about a sister whose brain only revolves about ”teasing” her brother and a story about the brother living in the past despite having your mother trying to make you happy at the expense of her own happiness. Now, this is all about me(I didn’t even finish reading the free chapters). But I can see from your review improvement seems to have been made regarding the plot line and all so i‘mma go back, read again and give it the review it deserves without bias(Not now though, kinda busy in the real world, that’s the reason it took me a while to reply) So you’re welcome
Confligere:Can you explain what you mean by a forced relationship between Kaile and his sister? All I have done is just show the nature of their relationship, until the last 5 chapters, their relationship has not changed. Only the acknowledgment of unspoken feelings natured since childhood. And i do write on the fly, but the plot goal of that segment of the story has already been established, it's more entertaining that way, as even i don't know what's going to happen next with the characters and story, i tried to write differently, plotting scene by scene, but all the excitement just washes away, making writing in itself pointless. Although, i do admit, the school section was glossed over, as i don't want to write something clique, but the foundation for future plot in the school has been established, as i have many idea's, that's all the school section was for. As for the power system and other such, i feel like it would take 1 thousand chapters, just to reach the peak of it. In essence to that section of the comment, everything has been planned out, other than how to get to the goal of the story in that specific section. Thanks for the review.
Can you explain what you mean by a forced relationship between Kaile and his sister? All I have done is just show the nature of their relationship, until the last 5 chapters, their relationship has not changed. Only the acknowledgment of unspoken feelings natured since childhood. And i do write on the fly, but the plot goal of that segment of the story has already been established, it's more entertaining that way, as even i don't know what's going to happen next with the characters and story, i tried to write differently, plotting scene by scene, but all the excitement just washes away, making writing in itself pointless. Although, i do admit, the school section was glossed over, as i don't want to write something clique, but the foundation for future plot in the school has been established, as i have many idea's, that's all the school section was for. As for the power system and other such, i feel like it would take 1 thousand chapters, just to reach the peak of it. In essence to that section of the comment, everything has been planned out, other than how to get to the goal of the story in that specific section. Thanks for the review.
Confligere:Can you explain what you mean by a forced relationship between Kaile and his sister? All I have done is just show the nature of their relationship, until the last 5 chapters, their relationship has not changed. Only the acknowledgment of unspoken feelings natured since childhood. And i do write on the fly, but the plot goal of that segment of the story has already been established, it's more entertaining that way, as even i don't know what's going to happen next with the characters and story, i tried to write differently, plotting scene by scene, but all the excitement just washes away, making writing in itself pointless. Although, i do admit, the school section was glossed over, as i don't want to write something clique, but the foundation for future plot in the school has been established, as i have many idea's, that's all the school section was for. As for the power system and other such, i feel like it would take 1 thousand chapters, just to reach the peak of it. In essence to that section of the comment, everything has been planned out, other than how to get to the goal of the story in that specific section. Thanks for the review.