some bad points. the story sometimes becomes unnecessarily complicated. like him explaining the components of the Laser weapon. it just needs to be believable that he can make a laser gun out of a car. The grammar has to improve and it has to be more interesting. Chapter 1 is very good grammatically and is interesting because it is not that complicated. Just remember that this is just my opinion. and this is more constructive criticism than anything else.
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LIKEhe thinks its being over complicated but i really like it when things are explained, unlike that dude i appreciate what you did and am excited to start reading.
yo author, not much of a dc fan but i heard that she was r*ped or something, is that true in this novel or what? also is there gonna be romance in here, gotta be honest with you i really dont want there to be romance in this novel so i want to know before hand to be prepared. thanks for answering in advance
who? there's a lot of DC characters who've been raped or close to it.