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harsh07
harsh07Author1yr
2023-12-06 19:19

I've improved some starting chapters please read and give feedback on whether they are still readable or not if they are still bad then I'll try to improve them again just keep supporting and I'll try my best

Rick in Marvel and DC: Fusion

harsh07
4.3
169 Chs

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Gh0st00
Gh0st00Lv15

are you going to start by redoing your synopsis his grandfather's for The grandfather's that don't make a whole lot of sense just say bricks and what do you mean walking through a mortal universe he's mortal so of course he's going to be walking through a mortal land or you could have just said something like journeying through Rick and Morty universe

1yr
Gh0st00
Gh0st00Lv15

I'm ready the first chapter feels like an AI wrote it I'm not kidding it seriously feels like I'm reading a Stephen King's The Tower but by an AI

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Gh0st00
Gh0st00Lv15

okay the story is not bad but there's too many errors you need to go back and fix all your chapters before you post new ones otherwise your story is never going to be good I don't care how intriguing the story is if there's all those errors then nobody can actually enjoy it if you're not good enough with English or marvel or DC in general find a friend that does it ask your patreons I'm sure somebody's willing to do something and FYI when you were talking about some of the villains it's clayface and Two-Face

1yr
harsh07
harsh07Author

I've corrected them already

Gh0st00:okay the story is not bad but there's too many errors you need to go back and fix all your chapters before you post new ones otherwise your story is never going to be good I don't care how intriguing the story is if there's all those errors then nobody can actually enjoy it if you're not good enough with English or marvel or DC in general find a friend that does it ask your patreons I'm sure somebody's willing to do something and FYI when you were talking about some of the villains it's clayface and Two-Face
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solo_leveling_god
solo_leveling_godLv4

bro any ship??

harsh07:I've corrected them already
1yr
Lord_Hastur
Lord_HasturLv5

harem??

1yr
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SAURON_
SAURON_Lv2

can you go back again and make them more readable my brain hurts from it all

harsh07:I've corrected them already
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AvatarLOK2
AvatarLOK2Lv3

This is fun. I like all the science talk and how while a bit inflate most of it is true. Also the character is fun. My biggest problem is just a problem that most translations have which is that you can tell its a translation with how the english is being used. I wouldn't even call that a problem at all. Good luck author.

1yr

king_frogv
king_frogvLv2

The potential of your story is good, but there are a few areas where you can improve. Firstly, you should work on improving your writing style. Additionally, it's important to pay attention to grammar and make necessary corrections. One suggestion is to have others read your work and provide feedback so that you can better understand what you're writing. Overall, focusing on these areas will help enhance your writing.

1yr
Olsenu
OlsenuLv1

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Alucard_7894
Alucard_7894Lv2

I don't know what to say I saw Rick and Morty and this guy is nothing like rick I mean helping batman and fighting villains I don't know maybe you want rick be a hero and it's okay he is not completely rick so he can be hero but fighting a villain with batman and he is not even ready completely and someone as smart as him should know throwing villains is useless and development is so slow I know he shouldn't be op but he in 50 chapter if he really gives his best try he should be able to take down at least half of the justice league otherwise it's a insult to rick in rick and Morty well this my thoughts maybe some of you like it

1yr
_DEKIM_
_DEKIM_Lv1

some bad points. the story sometimes becomes unnecessarily complicated. like him explaining the components of the Laser weapon. it just needs to be believable that he can make a laser gun out of a car. The grammar has to improve and it has to be more interesting. Chapter 1 is very good grammatically and is interesting because it is not that complicated. Just remember that this is just my opinion. and this is more constructive criticism than anything else.

1yr
Shadow1609
Shadow1609Lv15

Reveal spoiler

1yr
poposwitch
poposwitchLv2

Is it mtl ? The writing style and word choices are extremely Chinese. First 4 chapters were good. But then mtl started showing. And some with Rick's intelligent & not drugged to gills being so blaze about his security is... idk.

1yr
_DEKIM_
_DEKIM_Lv1

It's now a solid 4.7. But if you improve your grammar it will be a 4.8👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍It is also to improve the protagonist's charm. Make it stylish.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

1yr
Kaix
KaixLv2

Pretty interesting to see fuse DC and Marvel fanfic that actually good and on top of that the mc have the iq,soul and somewhat body of Rick from Rick and Morty fused with him so this gonna be hella fun😊 and I jus know it. Also very good story so far

1yr
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