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Odayaka
OdayakaAuthor1yr
2023-12-01 07:08

New novel, New world.This time I trying to dabble with both cultivation and magic world at once, it might get challanging but i think the plot is worth it.use this review as a place to ask questions regarding the book and suggestions and of course no spoilers let's get started with the jade beauty

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Daoist_Culture
Daoist_CultureLv15

Hello, is thwre any kind of yuri here? I dont like it so i wanted to ask 😁. Thanks!

Odayaka
OdayakaAuthor

No Yuri! No Ntr! The harem members love the mc not the other members

Lazy_Stellar
Lazy_StellarLv4

Isn't it Challenge*?

Odayaka
OdayakaAuthor

..... we cannot edit a review ..

Lazy_Stellar:Isn't it Challenge*?
Monarch_Lord
Monarch_LordLv3

is the mother in the harem??

gurpreet31
gurpreet31Lv2

gosh darn, thats one gorgeous specimen.

Troxking
TroxkingLv15

Will his harem… include his mom?

Odayaka
OdayakaAuthor

I am not sure as of Now. what do you guys think? should I add her ?

Troxking:Will his harem… include his mom?
Troxking
TroxkingLv15

The answer to that question will forever, and always, be yes.

Odayaka:I am not sure as of Now. what do you guys think? should I add her ?
kuba_dziwon
kuba_dziwonLv1

.NN.n.......nmmnmnnm.hhhn.n.......n.nnnh.mnn...

Odayaka
OdayakaAuthor

none at all

Daoist_Culture:Hello, is thwre any kind of yuri here? I dont like it so i wanted to ask 😁. Thanks!
Daoist_Culture
Daoist_CultureLv15

Thats not even a question! Mommy should be in the harem!

Odayaka:I am not sure as of Now. what do you guys think? should I add her ?
Yang_ki
Yang_kiLv4

yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes

Odayaka:I am not sure as of Now. what do you guys think? should I add her ?
Raj_Kumar_Sharma_4892
Raj_Kumar_Sharma_4892Lv3

So I have no problem with this novel but I believe this would've been better if the mc was not a God and had just transmigrated(it would've just been fan service driven plot but that's exactly why me and the other guys are here😭).

Odayaka
OdayakaAuthor

the Mommy in the harem hum, why not~

Daoist_Culture:Thats not even a question! Mommy should be in the harem!
Daoist_Culture
Daoist_CultureLv15

Its a fantasy anyway, people love winc est stories 😁

Odayaka:the Mommy in the harem hum, why not~
Odayaka
OdayakaAuthor

kek, we should tread that path safely, don't want to cross webnovel's rules.

Daoist_Culture:Its a fantasy anyway, people love winc est stories 😁
Daoist_Culture
Daoist_CultureLv15

Wn dont care since your book is already contracted. Its only a problem if lots of people will report you in the same time so wn will have to check whats the reason, and why would readers do that? I read many winc est books here and talk with authors, so I know a thing or 2 😁

Odayaka:kek, we should tread that path safely, don't want to cross webnovel's rules.
Michael_Hammond_9081
Michael_Hammond_9081Lv15

No invest please. Probably too late. Bye

Odayaka:I am not sure as of Now. what do you guys think? should I add her ?
AstaUzumaki
AstaUzumakiLv14

Odayaka:the Mommy in the harem hum, why not~
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GeneralDeFartos_L
GeneralDeFartos_LLv4

A clumsy attempt at writing a novel. Don't get me wrong, I liked the concept and I've been waiting for it to get more chapters before reading, but now that I've read about 50 chapters I'm just disappointed and dissatisfied. It has a unique interesting idea and throughout the story you can see what the author wanted to characters to be like. (Like how MC can do things impossible to do with qi cultivation or how a green haired mommy is a playful sugar mommy) The main problem with this story: 1- Exposition is not done properly. Author doesn't know what to give more information about and what to skip. Noah basically has no personality here while his previous body owner has a set personality, or how author kept using flashbacks at the start, or how we have no info on the Mage god Noah, or how we got too many useless info about irrelevant things. this is mainly cuz author doesn't know how to properly show us what he wants us to see. 2- Characters have messed up personalities. It feels like author just wants to add scenes he read in other works and wanted to have them attached to certain characters. (Noah is supposedly ruthless but acts kind to who he wants to. But here everytime he acts he's either flirty or teasing and when he has his moments it's not that cool, It just doesn't reflect an old man who's filled with wisdom.) (There's also mommy, she's supposedly mature, but she got over her sons death and gets blushing by Noah from day 1, there's no development, she's still getting over her loss, why would she feel a tingle in her heart just from some kindness? She's not naive, she's mature. So it doesn't make sense.) The relationship and feelings they feels towards each other just feel forced. 3- Author is dragging out what could be over and done long ago. He's adding new enemies just for the sake of it. A lot of elements here are pointless and don't add to the story. Dear author, think thoroughly before adding pointless drama and pointless info, would any of this be relevant after 30~60 chapters? I think not. It's just for added drama, but that just makes it as boring and cliche as other cultivation works.

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