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QuiteSarcastic
QuiteSarcasticLv411mth
2024-01-05 19:54

-I honestly looked forward to reading a proper and decently rated Naruto fanfic, but in all honesty, this was as far from that as it could have been. -Writing quality is decent, and the flow and explanations are well put together. -Story Development... This is where things start to go downhill. It's not that its... bad. It's more like it lacks reasoning and logic whenever the MC is given something, his reactions are unnatural as if a Chinese cultivator suddenly takes his place. Naruto suddenly will kill 12-15-year-olds to defend the "loved" ones he so conveniently forgets about who is left behind for his crush on Sasuke. -Character Design... kinda went ham on the Story Development and added tidbits there, but all I can say is that if you are looking for a "Naruto" fic, then don't expect one here. He is as far from a "Naruto-like" character as humanly possible. -World Background, nothing to say about that one. The fact that the prologue was a convoluted mess of epic proportions kind of set a bad example: "Sasuke kills himself to end whatever dream-like conflict between him and Naruto for some gods' forsaken reason. All that being said, give it a shot; it's not bad fan fiction by any means. It's just that you have to perhaps skim over certain details to enjoy it like proper reading material.

Naruto : Back to the Past

Salted_dragon
4.5
98 Chs

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Alfiemooon
AlfiemooonLv4

What you described sounds terrible lol

10mth
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Kono_Dio_na
Kono_Dio_naLv13

You have my thanks. I dodge the bullet here.

6mth
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KnightInArmor
KnightInArmorLv4

so do you know any proper Naruto fics?

4mth
QuiteSarcastic
QuiteSarcasticLv4

Linked this in a comment that got deleted some time ago, here's what I wrote. I got a few... 1. Naruto: Systematic Shinobi (Not finished currently on hiatus I believe.) 2. Peerless Darkness (Danzo fic, not too OC but a "what if" super decent.) 3. Naruto: Child of Chakra (By Mr.Gorilla, one if not the best fanfic story tellers.) 4. Naruto: The Blind Swordsman (Pre-Naruto birth) One of the best. 5. Reincarnated into the world of Naruto (By Onetim3) Not on webnovel, but on fanfiction. -- These are the ones I have on the top of my head at this point. If I recall more I'll see if I can add it here.

KnightInArmor:so do you know any proper Naruto fics?
4mth
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Dark_PersonJJ
Dark_PersonJJLv4

Oh Naruto story,whare he travels to the past,I will give it my support. And Hinata in bikini pic for you as my thanks.

1yr

Dark_PersonJJ
Dark_PersonJJLv4

Great Naruto series story who is about, What If Naruto had his Mother, Kushina in his life.

1yr
Daoist66W4wt
Daoist66W4wtLv13

Is good but this novel is similar to naruto hagoromo: rinnegan no kami

1yr
Dark_PersonJJ
Dark_PersonJJLv4

New Review,I realy like this New VERSION of Naruto and im glad thare is no Genderbend Sasuke but is just Sarada who take his place.

1yr
UnenlightenedOne
UnenlightenedOneLv14

i cant't...there are too many typos. it feel like MTL Chinese fic with little bit of human correction..sometime the way they talk feel too wuxia style while other time it's completely normal

1yr
Marcus_Hembree
Marcus_HembreeLv4

While it is a well used premises of a time-travel Fix-it, I do enjoy the writing narrative, just try and for a little authenticity of the MC personality. Even though Naruto has matured, I still expect to see some #1 unpredictable hyperactive knucklehead ninja inspired shenanigans. Because Naruto, pranking his opponents before whether accidental or purposeful is still a cliche that doesn't grow tiresome if it's done tastefully.

1yr
Azure_warrior
Azure_warriorLv14

NIce novel has a ton of potential to become one of the best Naruto fanfic on this platform. For now, I am loving the story. The writing is decent and very enjoyable story

1yr
Dark_PersonJJ
Dark_PersonJJLv4

Im glad you are back, i just Hope you will again update reguraly from now on, it would be great shame if you would drop this great FF.

6mth
Kono_Timoda
Kono_TimodaLv3

I would recommend the author reread the original and observe the words that are used, specifically, the way dialogues and monologues flow, punctuation and the time the author takes to flesh out each characters expressions. Imo, the idea is good but the writing style is lacking compared to the original. Although this was the first 8 chapters, but I think you shushed too much in those chapters.

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