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GreyKnights
GreyKnightsLv1411mth
2024-01-02 13:16

interesting read keep up the good work 😁

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Weaving_That
Weaving_ThatLv4

In general I like this fanfic. It's nice to read. I like that the crossovers with JJK are Slice of Life. That gives you the opportunity to throw in the funniest characters from as many worlds as you want without making a mess of the supernatural world or the power systems. The writing is very good in my inexperienced opinion, I have no problems with the flow and the dialogues. I don't have anything good to say about the characters or the world because I don't know where the franchises come from except for JJK. All the good things said now my complaints. The protagonist is nice, but I don't know if it's too early for me to say this, but I think she lacks personality. It's not bad, just a little bland. I think she could use some good/bad habits to give her more spark. Smoking, eating a lot, poor orientation, OCD, any nonsense you can think of would make her more memorable. In writing I think it would be better if you avoided putting your exposition comments in between, it takes it out of the immersion a bit.Speaking of taking out of the immersion... Honestly, everything about the ROB could very well be removed and everything would be better. Honestly it just complicates things and expands the universe more than necessary and it makes everything feel...useless. Finally...the system. I have no problem with there being a system, just with it being so unnecessarily informative. Having said all that...I hope my rant doesn't down you or anything, I'm just writing the things I didn't like and I'll take the opportunity to leave a review. Do what you want and I will continue reading because in general I like this fanfic.

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