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2023-12-06 23:47

In general I like this fanfic. It's nice to read. I like that the crossovers with JJK are Slice of Life. That gives you the opportunity to throw in the funniest characters from as many worlds as you want without making a mess of the supernatural world or the power systems. The writing is very good in my inexperienced opinion, I have no problems with the flow and the dialogues. I don't have anything good to say about the characters or the world because I don't know where the franchises come from except for JJK. All the good things said now my complaints. The protagonist is nice, but I don't know if it's too early for me to say this, but I think she lacks personality. It's not bad, just a little bland. I think she could use some good/bad habits to give her more spark. Smoking, eating a lot, poor orientation, OCD, any nonsense you can think of would make her more memorable. In writing I think it would be better if you avoided putting your exposition comments in between, it takes it out of the immersion a bit.Speaking of taking out of the immersion... Honestly, everything about the ROB could very well be removed and everything would be better. Honestly it just complicates things and expands the universe more than necessary and it makes everything feel...useless. Finally...the system. I have no problem with there being a system, just with it being so unnecessarily informative. Having said all that...I hope my rant doesn't down you or anything, I'm just writing the things I didn't like and I'll take the opportunity to leave a review. Do what you want and I will continue reading because in general I like this fanfic.

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How should I say this... hmm... Sorry but what you found annoying has already been added for around chapter 30ish. As I have answered in another comment before, I will be adding the world of Kobayashi's Dragon Maid and Noragami to the mix. But, don't worry as I will be making sure to align their power system to the best of my abilities. The protagonist is a Guerrilla soldier from a faraway era of constant warfare. Smoking and eating a lot is good and all but you must also see the perspective I am putting in here. And exposition in between was my bad, I tried it out of a sudden compulsion and if it damaged your reading experience then my apologies. Well, the ROB was a mere whim of mine, to make it someone a little funny but it seems to have been a wrong decision. Indeed, the system is a bit too informative, I have taken care to reduce it's presence around chapter 30ish but before that, please bare with the large info flood. And no, I am not down due to your review, in fact I find it quite useful in improving my writing. And thanks for your support.

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