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LazyWisp
LazyWispLv21yr
2024-01-03 13:32

Starting this review I want to talk about the positive. Author does an excelllent job of portraying characters and depicting scenes while occasionally I spot inconsistencies it’s not a completely unbearable read like 97% of the subpar novels on this app. The negative will only affect you if depending on your knowledge of jjk. A scene in particular that threw me off was when Reno even remotely struggled with Flyheads. Flyheads are so weak that even windows can safely handle them with no risk they’re catagorized as under 4th grade. Even fourth grade spirits are immensely weak mind you I’d suggest watching the clip of Gojo explaining how powerful each rank is to Itadori for reference. I understand that you want to properly grow your character and not just have them be extremely broken, but mind that 80% of sorcerer talent is innate although with a system that point is rendered irrelevant but even then… I’m ranting -_- TLDR: Everything is good just ensure you know just how the rankings scale (:

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LazyWisp
LazyWispLv2

And not to rush but unless your going to hunker down for a 300+ chapter story the pace might need to be upped a bit

Starry_Sky_0213
Starry_Sky_0213Lv3

even after 300 chapters the nc will barely be grade 3

LazyWisp:And not to rush but unless your going to hunker down for a 300+ chapter story the pace might need to be upped a bit
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Weaving_That
Weaving_ThatLv4

In general I like this fanfic. It's nice to read. I like that the crossovers with JJK are Slice of Life. That gives you the opportunity to throw in the funniest characters from as many worlds as you want without making a mess of the supernatural world or the power systems. The writing is very good in my inexperienced opinion, I have no problems with the flow and the dialogues. I don't have anything good to say about the characters or the world because I don't know where the franchises come from except for JJK. All the good things said now my complaints. The protagonist is nice, but I don't know if it's too early for me to say this, but I think she lacks personality. It's not bad, just a little bland. I think she could use some good/bad habits to give her more spark. Smoking, eating a lot, poor orientation, OCD, any nonsense you can think of would make her more memorable. In writing I think it would be better if you avoided putting your exposition comments in between, it takes it out of the immersion a bit.Speaking of taking out of the immersion... Honestly, everything about the ROB could very well be removed and everything would be better. Honestly it just complicates things and expands the universe more than necessary and it makes everything feel...useless. Finally...the system. I have no problem with there being a system, just with it being so unnecessarily informative. Having said all that...I hope my rant doesn't down you or anything, I'm just writing the things I didn't like and I'll take the opportunity to leave a review. Do what you want and I will continue reading because in general I like this fanfic.

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