Weaving_That

Fun. I like history, and reading about Yanderes is always a blast, especially Yuri. Pretty crack overall, but it's not something you have to read with a lot of logic in mind, so it's okay. My biggest problem is that it's tiring to read, because of one thing: repetition. It is not a comic gag style repetition, repetitive in words and things that happen. The same dialogues, the same actions, the same reactions, the same descriptions, over and over again. "I wake up and the sunlight makes me stronger" "I'm doing this for security" "Ma'am, she's dangerous""She stretches and everyone looks at her abs", etc. Reduce those repeated phrases/situations and it will be more enjoyable overall.

No te preocupes. No lo agregué al final, pero en realidad se lo llevo a lo que es basicamente su policía personal (cualquiera que venga de parte de Sakura). Bullseye va seguro a la super cárcel. Shoker y Vulture solo escaparon porque se los llevo la policía normal que esta basicamente en los bolsillo de La Maggia en su mayoría.

More or less random It can vary from just seeing seconds to seeing hours. The more the user uses it, the less time in the future they sees and the more they gets lost in visions. For example, if Rogue abused Roulette all the time she could take hours fainted just to see seconds into the future, but if she used it sparingly she could see hours instantly. It's still random, but not completely. I'll use hidden D20s to represent this as best I can.

En el caso de La Maggia en realidad es especialmente complicado porque de hecho, están en Europa. 🤭

I've read this before. I don't know when or where, but I did. Same with the whole infiltration part and becoming a ghost to spend the night unfound. Am I having a weird deja vu? Did you upload this somewhere else or did you get a lot of inspiration from another fanfic?

Thanks for the chapter. Though you should probably mention that Kashou and Bakuya are sort of an exception to your "no Noble Phantasm" thing, since they are, in fact, Noble Phantasms.

Tendré que comprar otro cargador. Escribir no es problema, editar es lo que realmente me está sacando de quicio. Y justo cuando decidí que era hora de ponerme a editar los capítulos más viejos. D:

Yes.

They aren't.

Another one of the many mistakes with pronouns that I have in the first chapters and that you just reminded me that I have to fix at some point. What better time than now, I guess.