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Tofu_eating_CatLv159mth
2024-04-24 17:39

I really tried to give this story a chance but after struggling to read ten chapters I'll have to drop it. Yes the obvious bot reviews are bad (but that's just playing the game, I get it) but the author might need some classes about writing stories. The story is written sometimes like a Theatre play wright,(basic positioning of things and basic speech lines); then like a normal light novel with proper scenery description and conversations, character descriptions (angry, sad, shocked, etc,) edit: these parts feel like other Stories and their given similar scenes; and then everything is thrown out the window and it's a vomit of speech lines - " ", Double Quotation marks are used both for thoughts and speech - There's no clear distinction to know who is talking and talking to whom. (There's a part in chapter 1 that made me think that the cat actually talked back saying "Hey!") It feels more like a rough draft for a comic/manga then a light novel, being more focused on the speech bubbles and thing that directly affect the MC then the surrounding, the atmosphere and (isn't a must but inner thoughts and feelings ) All together not good but I wish the author luck in future endevavors

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Xerxes1998Lv4

You saved me from reading trash

Tofu_eating_CatLv15

glad to help 😁, am a little embarrased but don't take my opinion as fact😅. 🫣

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NamasayaLv15

I literally came here looking for this type of review because I wanted to know it wasn't just me who was struggling to get through these chapters. I greatly appreciate this review

Yama1220Lv13

never mind I quit at 38

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