It's an interesting fic with the potential to become a good story, but several small problems that are so basic that they shouldn't be there detract from the reading. The most notable of these problems is that the author uses quotation marks for both speeches and thoughts, which sometimes makes it confusing to know whether the MC is speaking or thinking. Another problem are moments when the plot is forced, like when Cana looks at the MC when she meets him and he immediately asks her out on a date. It's not illogical, but the way all the development occurs in two paragraphs makes it strange, forced and uninteresting. Sudden and somewhat forced developments like this are common in this fic.
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Thanks for the feedback I'll try to be better
