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Kagio
KagioLv41yr
2024-02-09 21:18

After 25 chapters or so i had to drop this. i dont know how long till he gets to be a real villain but after this long of a prolouge just to know his revenge for kevin i cant read it anymore. the moment where he could have killed him he gets teleported away because of plot and then i thought how often do these things happen? and till now mc didnt have a single win only betrayals, deaths and in the beginning his pathetic life. i mean yeah its ok to have a tranformation from low to high but even after 20 chaps there is nothing. yeah there is the system now but then this whole "oh no something happend and you have to teleport away" happend . i am thinking when author decides to put the chapters behind tickets and how long till kevin dies. i dont want to waste them here when there are better options. for me its ok when the mc prepares or slowly manipulates the heroes so that many chapters are ok to have but this was really one of my most hated tropes where the mc fights his enemes and then either side just runs away successfully because of plot. i mean the beginning and synopsis is where the author catches the reader but i literally had to skip a few chapters SPOILER: after ali confronts kevin in the city and after he gets to know emily so i can know "ahh finally he gets the system" dragging this for so long is really not a win for me maybe having a slower pace is good but not that slow for only L's for the Mc.its really not satisfying to read you know? But then i was like finallyyy he gets his revenge, only for the author to say not for you my man😶 *proceeds to teleport mc away because of plot* so i hope you know how much this triggered me.

Rich Villain of the Ruined World

DevilDarkness
4.0
69 Chs

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DevilDarkness
DevilDarknessAuthor

I get it man. this novel had a ton of flaws and i agree. I hate making it like this now too. that's why I planned a rewrite and starting from scratch again. where none of this cliche happens and plot doesn't pop up to save the protagonist every time. u can check the rewrite version which is better than all this if u want - story's root idea is same but everything else is whole new. life of a stepping stone is what I called that one - you can chk that one and you'll understand all the flaws u said have already been fixed in that one. mc ain't pathetic there. he got the golden finger fast. he isn't losing and is instead playing around with protagonist and his heroines. try it if u want

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DevilDarkness
DevilDarknessAuthor

ohh and thanks for the long review. I should atleast appreciate the effort it took u to write all that

1yr
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Kagio
KagioLv4

no problem i get to be a bit emotional and have to write my opinion out and after reading your response i will try to read your other version.^^ in the end its just my opinion but thx for replying.❤️

DevilDarkness:ohh and thanks for the long review. I should atleast appreciate the effort it took u to write all that
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DevilDarkness
DevilDarknessAuthor

well if I can't be shameless and boast about my own book, then what's the point of me being hidden behind a keyboard. so here you go --- this novel is the best novel ever written. I gave it 5* cuz that's the minimum it deserves. this novel is gonna go down in history and your children shall read it for generations to come - so don't you dare ignore this novel and move out. just add this novel in your library and read it. I guarantee on my left kidney that you'll love it. I swear on Noah and kevin's name

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Kw0z
Kw0zLv14

1st chapter, and this is already a no-go. The MC is clearly a masochist and a simp. It’s no wonder she chose the protagonist over him, honestly. For the first time in my life, your novel has made me wish for the protagonsit to get cucked. My lord this is garbage. You’ve ruined my mood.

1yr
ryuk9PE
ryuk9PELv4

Have been waiting for this book for centuries and man it is the best till now other than this same author main novel (definitely not because author paid me to say this)

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HeroCultivator
HeroCultivatorLv2

Let's go. I shall start this novel too. just saw your review on pandanovel and here I am. hope it's not poison

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K7RM4
K7RM4Lv13

i expected good things from the author based on the last novel and it didn't disappoint except for the fact that I have not seen near enough funeral chapters as yet but its' still new so I excuse him for that.I would say give it a try you might like it everyone is different and has their own opinions and preferences so give it a try and see if you like it or not.

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DaoisthiEB5M
DaoisthiEB5MLv3

im just dissapoint i get scum .. the backstory is so long

1yr
Tidas
TidasLv5

Bad so bad, back fourth between present is just bad way start a novel and ive never finshed one thats done it. 1 star i cant bloody see the stars to rate properly.

1yr
Lagash
LagashLv1

I dont even know anything by chapter 20 and why it happened, plot holes are massive, while no real progress even more confusing the way you did the transmigration is just confusing and makes no sense. the story didnt pull me in the first 20 chapters sorry. I cant read this.

1yr
BlondStrawberry
BlondStrawberryLv14

5 star WQ 5 star US 1 stars for the rest. You stretched the story way too thin for personallity settings. Then took a nosedive into the abyss for world setting I dont even know anything by chapter 20 and why it happened, plot holes are massive, while no real progress even more confusing the way you did the transmigration is just confusing and makes no sense. the story didnt pull me in the first 20 chapters sorry. I cant read this.

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