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2024-01-17 18:40

One of the best fanfics about Fate. The author has done a good job of gathering and using information, although there are some problems with the main character. Maybe I can't understand him as a reader, but it's really annoying when he cries for no "good reason". You did a great job with the world, but not with the main character....

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