I am giving this review based on my liking, and everyone has different preferences. Also, as an author, here are the things I would suggest:-Hermes woke up from his slumber. I think 'slumber' is not the correct word; describing how he opened his eyes would be smoother.-The advice I give to every author is that breaking the long paragraph into shorter ones can enhance readability, especially during transitions or changes in the character's thoughts.-The transition from the physical sensations to the character's memories of the previous night is a bit abrupt.-"Too bad I don't have any cell service right now. Or else, I would have been able to call 911, let alone expose some alien murals..." could be clearer if separated into two sentences for better readability.-Using "He was filled with fear, knowing that he might never see his family again," might sound much better than "may." -And avoid using 'Hermes couldn't help but' multiple times in a single Chapter, as it was used three times, and in the starting line at that.

The writing quality was good, although the paragraph could have been seperated for easier read. Character development was executed decently but it could hve been better with mor ebuild up and suspense. The pacing was 5/5, though transitions was a bit rough, the characters are very likeable, certain areas are lacking in clarifications, like the interaction and actions. also, some phrase like, "he couldnt help", "he said", "he sigh" etc were continued quite obcessantly, they were redundant in certain areas (the firat chapter mostly). Avoid directly saying what it is, using things like "suddenly", "he was angry", "he felt" and try to deliver the suddenness or sensation with actions instead. For example instead of saying "he was annoyed" to "He narrowed his eyes and click his tongue". The phrasings and execution, lastly was a bit lacking. overall decent but it coldve been a lot better. I hope you could continue.

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Amazing work! The writer is truly an artist, their words paint a vivid picture. I really love the mystery throughout, it makes me curious and wanting more. As for the fight scenes, well, they're so exciting. A must read!

What a nice start. Right into action and a hook, also an intriguing development of Mc’s thought processess. Good job

so far so good . why Harem . just make one woman fl no more or maybe your work goes " _":

pretty neat and decent. usually i dont start reading a book this soon and chanced upon this one and rightfully so. hopefully you keep updating it.