FrozenOverTheMoon

Great first chapter!

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There are a lot of things that are fairly original in this novel. For one, the system feels unique in many aspects; I am not a big fan of System novels in general but I still found a lot of enjoyment with this. But where this story shines is in lore and fantasy! The Author does a phenomenal job at world-building and setting up interesting settings. There is a lot of creativity in his writing and I wish to see more! The only slight negative I have with this is the pacing which is way quicker than what I am used to, but that isn't the fault of the author; it's just their writing style. The action is also very amazing so I don't think you will ever be bored reading this! A solid 4.8/5 stars!

Slow down the pacing just a bit and fix a few phrases here and there. Other than that, a perfect start to a new story.

Coming into this, you were probably baited by the title. DO NOT LET IT MISLEAD YOU! This story is masterfully crafted with intricate plotlines, characters, and world-building. Yes, harem elements exist, but that is not the only thing it has to offer! All the characters are wonderfully crafted with delicate details to their backstories, and they all make logical decisions. Not once during my reading did I think that any of the characters felt fake in their dialogue or their actions. The main character Jack, is multilayered and deeply connects to the narrative, creating a powerful driving force for the entire plot. Also, can we talk about the amazing writing quality?! As an author myself, the way characters converse is completely in line with how I would expect real sea folk to talk to each other! The descriptive language makes this story seem as if it's being narrated like a sea shanty! The comedy is also very well done! None of it felt cliche and It got me laughing/giggling occasionally without me even thinking about it. None of the jokes flew over my head, the author does a wonderful job of presenting them organically without hurting the agency of the plot. He also interweaves them at the perfect moment so the tone/mood of a scene is not impacted. Give it a try, I'm sure the first chapter alone will hook you!

If you are looking for a book that is different from the norm, this one has you covered. Other than the fact that there are two MCs, the author does a good job of writing each one separately; it's clear to me that the eventual intertwining of the two story lines will be beautifully executed. When it comes to writing quality, the work they present is phenomenally done. Care was put into every paragraph as there is a lot of rich vocabulary present to paint the scenes in our minds. This is coming from an author too! As for the world itself, so far it has been somewhat bland and nonexistent, however, that is really not a big point of contention since the story does not orbit around such masterful settings or fantastical realms; it simply portrays the trials and tribulations that two teenagers have to go throughout their normal lives. There will be twists and turns of course, but the plot will mainly revolve around the two main characters as they navigate through this mortal existence. Overall, this is a solid read if you are looking for a slice of life with some spice to it; those of you who like to find something to relax to will enjoy this.

Shameless author here. You all know the deal by now. I'm going to post this review and just toot my own horn for the next few hundred words... Let's get started. If you are just checking this book out now, I recommend giving it 5 chapters as that will give you a general idea of what I'm crafting here... Here is what to expect in the future: - Gods, Deities, and Cosmological Horrors that might or might not drive us all insane if they were real. - A compelling romance. Won't spoil, but I can promise that it will be interesting. - Insane amounts of lore, world-building, and mysteries for you all to crack your heads at... There is a lot more to my story, I promise you will not regret reading it :) If you have any questions, comment them down below and I'll try my best to answer them (without spoiling). P.S.- I am still stuck on the moon, someone please help...

The main character is a reflection of what most men want in life. This story is extremely relatable. The author's writing style is very good as well; you will never be confused when reading it.

bro is so done with life

Phrases are definitely something i need to work on.