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AetherrrLv41yr
2024-01-02 03:20

Author needs to put attention into small but important details, MC sometimes contradicts himself and author seems to mistake some of the character names constantly. Other than that i think the story is good but Author needs to put more research in order to make story more enjoyable, also please for the love of God don't call familia a family

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writing quality:2 stars, He can spell the goddeses names right and He can't incorporate any resembles of the actual characters in the fanfic.For example Hestia would never call Bell son, yet here it's used every single time which is very out of character.The only character he got correct was Aiz and that's cause she doesn't talk lol.His spelling is bad and it creates confusion, hephaestus now goes by hephbasoas or some weird bumbo jumbo like that. story development: It's pretty mid.The usual "I go into the dungeon and grind with my system".3 stars cause I could not get far enough for a story development to occur. character design: This is the reason I couldn't get far enough in the fanfic.The main character is 20-21 and he acts like a child.He gets overly mad at being called boy for some odd reason and he also gets mad over being asked about his past.Mind you he doesn't even have a past cause he transmigrated into the body and the memories just intertwined. The character is a bit on the dumb side or things when it comes to emotional control as he let's every small thing pass him off.He went to a dwarf for a weapon he said "Mr.dwarf", the dwarf said "Yes, boy" and all of a sudden the Mc gets mad for being called boy and thinks about using 15 fire balls or whatever. by the way the infinite mana thing has a nerf.Big nerf.so yeah. skipping update stability world background is normal 3 stars.Nothing is off track from cannon so what can I even say?.He doesn't do anything note worthy besides steal a book but he gives it back the day after. over all 2.6 stars. This is not a harem and that's the only upside of this.Although he did have a one night stand with a goddess. Anyway I recommend not to read a waste of time if u hate edgy, emotionally unstable adults.

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