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krokrok007
krokrok007Lv41yr
2023-11-29 05:09

its great fanfic the only thing that could be better is how in the beginning the MC acts like young master that can't see mount Tai when he isnt even that strong And some gramaticall mistakes

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Ireallylikereading
IreallylikereadingLv4

i see what you did there noice

KasiCair
KasiCairLv1

Yeah, the beginning is mentally painful to read. The way the MC talks? It makes the author seem mentally challenged. The way he easily gets angry for no good reason at all? He needs some emotional counseling. The opinions this author/MC have? Some of them are really making my brain just stop, wondering if my IQ is not dropping from reading it. It is a pity. I quite liked this author's One Piece fic. It was not perfect by any means but much better than this. Can't really judge the 'advanced' chapters since I am not there yet. But I am having really hard time not dropping it and I am still just at ch10.

KasiCair
KasiCairLv1

Yeah, I got as far as ch13 before I gave up. I just can't. With every paragraph, the MC seems dumber and dumber. The author is clearly thinking he is cool by acting like 9 yo mentally challenged Chinese Young Master. This is worthless garbage. Sorry, I am salty. Because the idea has a lot of potential. But it seems the author is hell-bent on making it worse and worse with how his MC acts. It's aggravating. For those wondering if they should read this... make sure you can turn your brain off to the point where you start involuntarily drooling due to how mentally absent you'd be. If you can do that, then go for it.

KasiCair:Yeah, the beginning is mentally painful to read. The way the MC talks? It makes the author seem mentally challenged. The way he easily gets angry for no good reason at all? He needs some emotional counseling. The opinions this author/MC have? Some of them are really making my brain just stop, wondering if my IQ is not dropping from reading it. It is a pity. I quite liked this author's One Piece fic. It was not perfect by any means but much better than this. Can't really judge the 'advanced' chapters since I am not there yet. But I am having really hard time not dropping it and I am still just at ch10.
Mob_Character12
Mob_Character12Lv12

kalyan_kumar_kk2
kalyan_kumar_kk2Lv4

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arya_agustin
arya_agustinLv2

Well, most CN fanfics are like that and.. from the title alone you can guess how it will turn out. so I read the first few chapters, then I skipped to the middle and end just by reading the title. patrrick_star_schleeepzzzz.jpg

arya_agustin
arya_agustinLv2

cme *chapter title

arya_agustin:Well, most CN fanfics are like that and.. from the title alone you can guess how it will turn out. so I read the first few chapters, then I skipped to the middle and end just by reading the title. patrrick_star_schleeepzzzz.jpg
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Keyaruga_Tsuki
Keyaruga_TsukiLv4

writing quality:2 stars, He can spell the goddeses names right and He can't incorporate any resembles of the actual characters in the fanfic.For example Hestia would never call Bell son, yet here it's used every single time which is very out of character.The only character he got correct was Aiz and that's cause she doesn't talk lol.His spelling is bad and it creates confusion, hephaestus now goes by hephbasoas or some weird bumbo jumbo like that. story development: It's pretty mid.The usual "I go into the dungeon and grind with my system".3 stars cause I could not get far enough for a story development to occur. character design: This is the reason I couldn't get far enough in the fanfic.The main character is 20-21 and he acts like a child.He gets overly mad at being called boy for some odd reason and he also gets mad over being asked about his past.Mind you he doesn't even have a past cause he transmigrated into the body and the memories just intertwined. The character is a bit on the dumb side or things when it comes to emotional control as he let's every small thing pass him off.He went to a dwarf for a weapon he said "Mr.dwarf", the dwarf said "Yes, boy" and all of a sudden the Mc gets mad for being called boy and thinks about using 15 fire balls or whatever. by the way the infinite mana thing has a nerf.Big nerf.so yeah. skipping update stability world background is normal 3 stars.Nothing is off track from cannon so what can I even say?.He doesn't do anything note worthy besides steal a book but he gives it back the day after. over all 2.6 stars. This is not a harem and that's the only upside of this.Although he did have a one night stand with a goddess. Anyway I recommend not to read a waste of time if u hate edgy, emotionally unstable adults.

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