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Ramses_The_Third
Ramses_The_ThirdLv11yr
2023-11-18 12:27

Ok, this is honestly a pretty decent story overall. It has all the hallmarks of a good story, with pretty good grammar and plot-line. However, it does have some issues. The pacing is pretty abysmal, and despite there being 15+ chapters, it feels like it is still at the starting line. Not necessarily bad, but the extraneous plot-lines are really interesting enough to keep my interest. Most of the character are pretty in-character, as far as I know. The MC is a bit irritating, while it is good that he isn't the 'instant prodigy OP', his general attitude can just be a bit annoying. Especially since with the whole Ten Shadows thing, I was really hoping for a more JJK character mentality. A lot of these issues could be resolved with time, but right now they are a bit too much for me to continue with this story. I wish you the best of luck author!

Jujutsu Reincarnation: Unleashing The Ten Shadows In Naruto

BurgerNoTomatoes
4.5
55 Chs

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Mistyar
MistyarLv4

As I'm writing this the fic is in its early stages but it's looking really good. Onto the review: Writing Quality:5/5 supreme. In all the fanfics I've read I'd notice a bit of grammatical errors this is pristine. good stuff. Story Development:4/5 Pacing is nice but l can see you getting better at it. The second chapter of the child arc before the academy seemed a bit drawn out but you established how the characters synergise with each other so no complaints. Character Design: 5/5 Loveable MC nara clan isn't loud and annoying love shikaku and shikimaru The main character akira nara for once in a Naruto fanfic will not make you cough blood like your in a wuxia novel. just for that read it also I adore ten shadows. Updating Stability: 4/5 The fic is in its early stages so can't say a lot bout this. World Background: 4/5 only 4/5 cause I've personally suffered so much Naruto fics. To the author you'r doing God's work supremely done. I hope l can see this go a long and prosperous way. Also thanks for replying to comments! In short: author Is goated same with the story definitely have my eyes peeled for this. this is the good stuff

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BurgerNoTomatoes
BurgerNoTomatoesAuthor

With this treasure, I summon... a 5 Star Review. OC Insert Reincarnated with The Ten Shadows Technique From JJK into the Naruto World, with LIMITED Knowledge. The Story takes its time to develop. It's Funny? (Sometimes, though laughing at your own jokes is kind of weird so I'll leave this option vague and up to your judgment) It's Interesting? (Could be) It's Slice Of Life? (Sort of.) Has Action? (Working on it) Has Adventure? (Working on it) Has Romance? (Eventually, not any time soon) No Harem? (Yes, there is no harem) Realistically Strong MC? (Still too early to conclude but I'm trying my best so that would be the case) Does He Have Mahoraga On Speed Dial? (Mahoraga has been ghosting him lately) Does his Domain Expand? (Later on in the far future. When cars can fly and chickens can too. Chickens can't fly, you won't convince me otherwise.) Is the MC a Chad? (No, but he's trying) Conclusion... Read it if this interests you! If you have any questions I try my best to respond to them! I also enjoy any time of feedback and interaction! It helps me improve the fic alongside you readers! *Cough* Steal Ideas *Cough* And hope you enjoy the fic if you decide to read it!

1yr
True_Vanity
True_VanityLv4

Jeff approves 👍

1yr
its_sage27
its_sage27Lv4

A solid story for me .... story pace is good .. MC is really beautifully fleshed out ... update stability is decent i guess and author says he is working on it ... a 9/10 story for me

1yr
Rex_Lapis_0036
Rex_Lapis_0036Lv4

I have been reading fanfics for about 3 years now. some of them are Naruto ones , Avatar ones, a few Dc ones a few Mtl ones majority of them consists of naruto ones tho genshin fics and MHA ones but this is the diamonds in the rough this story has the most natural integration of the mc in the world and the clever use of Kyubbi attack to orphan him and make him feel iffy about Naruto and his 30% retention of memories is an ingenious idea truthfully. I don't really care about Harem since people can have multiple relationship until they commit to someone. So I don't mind him having a more humane side since we all have had various relations. Bro I love how he interacts with his aunt and uncle. And the most fun times for me were when he thew jabs at sakura's forehead without even saying it. WHAHAHAHHAHAHAAA

1yr
Beeswax_simulator2
Beeswax_simulator2Lv4

I'll give you 2 power stones everyday i don't know if this will help you be motivated but please continue this fanfic

1yr
Stark165017
Stark165017Lv1

Keep up the great work and I hope you could maintain or improve your novel quality in the future. Lastly be safe and stay awesome 👍 👍 👍 👍

1yr
Young_fruit_Smiley
Young_fruit_SmileyLv14

so, when you say slow burn, is for the mc or us... ?

1yr
Sparsh_Kumar_1064
Sparsh_Kumar_1064Lv4

A very good start. I look forward to reading this.

1yr
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