Item: AlterEden
Rating: 4.4
Author: Daoist_Cheese_Loaf

Daoist_Cheese_LoafLv21yr

2023-08-23 00:05

There's not much to say about the writing quality, there are no noticeable errors, and it flows easily. Since it's only 1 chapter, there's not much to comment on. But what bothered me the most was the excessive amount of point of view changes, this is good for building a background of the world, but it would be better to only have 1 or 2 in the same chapter, this would help to delve much deeper into the story with ease and keeping the world building going. For example, the first point of view was almost unnecessary due to how little was shown, but the others were excellent, laid the groundwork for the story and presented the characters and plot consistently. The novel has potential, if it maintains this quality, it will probably be very successful.

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