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alu_sachiLv121yr
2023-08-22 11:01

This is something good although the chapters are a few.Author, please update more.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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Husniya_S
Husniya_SLv12

What an Awesome read. I read the synopsis and the first chapter. I was immediately hooked. Keep it up, author. Please update more chapters. Your work is great!

1yr

Rosewater15
Rosewater15Lv2

This is defo one of my longer reads. The writing quality is really good, and the settting, for some reason i thought would be modern but this rusty fantasy setting (if yk what im talking abt) works well too! maybe split chapters up into 3s tho? it might make your updates more consistent lol.

1yr
Daoist_Cheese_Loaf
Daoist_Cheese_LoafLv2

There's not much to say about the writing quality, there are no noticeable errors, and it flows easily. Since it's only 1 chapter, there's not much to comment on. But what bothered me the most was the excessive amount of point of view changes, this is good for building a background of the world, but it would be better to only have 1 or 2 in the same chapter, this would help to delve much deeper into the story with ease and keeping the world building going. For example, the first point of view was almost unnecessary due to how little was shown, but the others were excellent, laid the groundwork for the story and presented the characters and plot consistently. The novel has potential, if it maintains this quality, it will probably be very successful.

1yr
Aidan_Grey
Aidan_GreyLv2

Although there is only ond chapter i have few thing to say. In terms of narrative quality, the author showcased impressive storytelling skills. However, there were a few instances where the pacing felt slightly rushed, and I noticed a few minor grammatical errors. Nonetheless, these are minor issues that can easily be addressed during the editing and refinement process.

1yr
ShyEdward
ShyEdwardLv2

First chapter got me hooked not going to lie. Hope you plan on updating more frequently. Overall good first started. I normally don't like books which too long but this was decent to say the least.🔥😁🤍

1yr
Pixxie_Mysteria999
Pixxie_Mysteria999Lv2

This is an interesting start, even though this is the first chapter. The only thing that needs to be fixed are the paragraphs and some grammar issues, but other than that, it was good so far and I definitely would recommend.

1yr
Cloudee77
Cloudee77Lv2

Wonderful beginning. Though it's just one chapter but I can feel the potential it holds. The pacing, the mysterious elements and a glimpse of the outer world. Great work.

1yr
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