The story has been plenty enjoyable for the first 27 chapters. The writing is pretty fun, and it feels a bit more natural than many other MCU fics. I like the MC for now too. Unfortunately, there are a few problems.First, the protaganists age. The MC doesn't ever mention it to anyone. The issue is that Rimuru, who the MC is based on, doesn't grow. Only a few special events (ones unlikely to repeat in the MCU like mass murder to become a demon king) ever increase his size, and even then Rimuru stays looking like a child. Why suffer being treated like a child if everyone is going to quickly realize she isn't gorwing anyway? Just tell people it's an illness preventing growth. Such things exist IRL.Second problem is fairly mine, just inconsistent. Although the initial cause the the MC wearing dresses is fine, and can even be used as a reason for him to still wear them occasionally, it makes no sense why he can't get pants later. He can jusy buy them online; he's alreafy made purchases there, so nothing is stopping him. Worst case he makes them himself. Though why anyone would expect him to work on his mech in a dress and not worry about his saftey is a mystery. Finally, my biggest complaint. The MC going to elementary school. The government pushing for it is a silly excuse as the MC could have easily just homeschooled and finished all courses quickly (The fastest anyonr graduated high school IRL is at the age of 6).Going there to make friends or network is even more of a joke. School in real life is not like that. You actually need to study (or waste time doing nothing), and that would drive a college student nuts. Most communication is either at lunch or after school. He can always meet characters after school. Plus, the reasoing for accepting the female status om his ID is to avoid being treated poorly, yet going to school with blue hair and gold eyes wouldn't make everyone suspicious that she is a mutant? Or the fact that she doesn't age? And if she just transforms to look older temporarly, why not do that from the start?
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LIKEUgh, I wish Webnovel kept spacing/new lines. Just wanted to add that I still gave it 4 stars despite the problems I listed because they aren't severe yet. The first problem is more of something that can easily cause issues later than an existing one. The second one is a small inconstancy. The final one can easily be resolved in many way. Maybe he plans to make a mess there and SHIELD will realize sending him to school was a bad idea. At the same time, many groups are obviously aware of him now and are targeting him. This would obviously put the students in the school in danger. Sooner or later, this would also force him to leave school. No way SHEILD can keep an army there to ensure no one targets him, and a few agents would definitely nit be enough when someone already broke into a place protected by Stark to kidnap the MC.
For the clothing I feel that the MC just liked looking at themself in girls clothing tbh… As for the school it was stated that MC went to school as a compromise to SHIELD which was more of a compromise. Well at least a one sided comprimise. For age I also think it’s a bit of a problem however I would like to see how it goes.
It was explicitly stated that he didn't like wearinv dresses at all at first, and was simply numbed to it after a while. And I have no problem with him wearing dresses. They would fit him. My problem is that it makes so sense for him to wear only dresses (especially with him doing mechanical work), nor that he is unable to get any pants. Even if people around him see him as a girl, why can't girls wear pants? It wouldn't even stick out..As for the school part, I can see the MC joining to mess around for a short while, but I feel like putting a trouble magnet like the MC into a place filled with kids is far too reckless. If he doesn't care about their lives, the kids could become collateral to any attackers, if he does care, they become easy hostages. Regardless, there are too many chances for accidents. No way hostile organizations would ignore him in such a prime location.
Pandalph:For the clothing I feel that the MC just liked looking at themself in girls clothing tbh… As for the school it was stated that MC went to school as a compromise to SHIELD which was more of a compromise. Well at least a one sided comprimise. For age I also think it’s a bit of a problem however I would like to see how it goes.
How do you make new lines? Just hitting enter a couple times on my phone doesn't seem to work.
Pandalph:For the clothing I feel that the MC just liked looking at themself in girls clothing tbh… As for the school it was stated that MC went to school as a compromise to SHIELD which was more of a compromise. Well at least a one sided comprimise. For age I also think it’s a bit of a problem however I would like to see how it goes.
Um, I didn't say the Limulu didn't wear pants?
Unstable_One:It was explicitly stated that he didn't like wearinv dresses at all at first, and was simply numbed to it after a while. And I have no problem with him wearing dresses. They would fit him. My problem is that it makes so sense for him to wear only dresses (especially with him doing mechanical work), nor that he is unable to get any pants. Even if people around him see him as a girl, why can't girls wear pants? It wouldn't even stick out..As for the school part, I can see the MC joining to mess around for a short while, but I feel like putting a trouble magnet like the MC into a place filled with kids is far too reckless. If he doesn't care about their lives, the kids could become collateral to any attackers, if he does care, they become easy hostages. Regardless, there are too many chances for accidents. No way hostile organizations would ignore him in such a prime location.
My bad, it seems I auto-assumed that based off chapter 11 and his shopping with Pepper earlier. It's mentioned how they might not even sell him clothes at stores, and he asks Tony if he wants to try wearing women's clothing, implying he only had access to women's clothes. Only dresses were mentioned when Pepper was giving him clothes. I just assumed that meant he had no access to pants, and that line still confused me about why he couldn't just buy online.
Rei444:Um, I didn't say the Limulu didn't wear pants?
No that was kinda just a funny scene, naturally Limulu bought more clothes after Mars made money...
Unstable_One:My bad, it seems I auto-assumed that based off chapter 11 and his shopping with Pepper earlier. It's mentioned how they might not even sell him clothes at stores, and he asks Tony if he wants to try wearing women's clothing, implying he only had access to women's clothes. Only dresses were mentioned when Pepper was giving him clothes. I just assumed that meant he had no access to pants, and that line still confused me about why he couldn't just buy online.
Yeah, I tend to overread into things, and I was definitely entertained by the idea of Tony trying on a dress.
Rei444:No that was kinda just a funny scene, naturally Limulu bought more clothes after Mars made money...
:O I'll think about adding that!
Unstable_One:Yeah, I tend to overread into things, and I was definitely entertained by the idea of Tony trying on a dress.
