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2023-08-27 00:09

This seems super interesting so far. I absolutely love (well love isn't the right word because I dislike most of them but this is good) the characters. There are some grammar and punctuation mistakes, but nothing major. Also, I think it would really benefit this story if the first chapter was a little more suspense-filled, but everything else about this story is awesome. Amazing novel!!

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