webnovel
Darktea9876
Darktea9876Lv411mth
2024-05-09 07:58

The story harbored a promising premise, but fell short of its potential. While the concept was intriguing, the execution lacked depth across various elements such as character development, kingdom building, and pacing. Although the main character showed promise, the supporting cast remained superficial. Similarly, while glimpses of a well-built kingdom were evident, overall depth was lacking. The storyline felt rushed, denying readers the chance to fully immerse themselves in the plot's intricacies. As the narrative progressed, the initial intrigue waned, leading to a gradual decline in engagement. Overall, while the book had potential, it ultimately failed to live up to it.

Eternal life begins with saving my clan

_EverSmile
4.3
453 Chs

Liked by 6 people

LIKE
empty img

No replies. Be the first!

Other Reviews
_EverSmile
_EverSmileAuthor

Hey, Author here. I'll be bias and give my book five star. Though I know it worth it. Let dive straight to what to expect from this book. A wise and overpower Mc that will not think with his little brother. Harem. Yes. System. Yes. Mystery. Yes. Revenge. Yes. Worldbuilding with modern invention introduce by the Mc. This is a story where the MC is not going to level up alone, but the whole world will grow stronger with him. A fight not only against the Mc, but the world itself. A story where a mortal planet ascend to the upper realm and dominate other realms with the Mc. With Modern invention and Ancient Techniques; the Mc and the Lotus World dominate the multi universe. Guess, this is all I can say. If you want to find out how everything unravel. Read to find out. Cheers.

1yr

Dzero
DzeroLv15

I read a lot of the starting off immortal genre, and I came into this story expecting much of the same, but I was wrong. This is a great novel already, and I just made it to the premium section when it began to pick up more traction. It has me hooked and was immediately added to my favorites. If you are looking for a novel to read, then I suggest you pick this one up.

1yr
Daoist_Culture
Daoist_CultureLv15

Hello. Is there any kind of yuri here? I hate that stuff and would like to know before reading. thanks

1yr
Fanjo
FanjoLv4

It is a good read until i realised that it is a system story. I dont read system stories but i still leaving behind a good review as it is an interesting story N a good read.

1yr
Daoist4bMk5P
Daoist4bMk5PLv15

don't know anything from how the world works or looks or anything about cultivation and its levels and it jumps from one thing to the other it needs to slow down and give more info about everything and if it did it would be a great novel bit now it's just Ok(chapter30)and sorry english is not my first language

1yr
Mohd_Afzal_8933
Mohd_Afzal_8933Lv4

Every chapter don't start where last chapter end and there are many things left to imagine us by ourselves . world building and character design are also so-so . I thought this is good novel but I was wrong beware of fake comments

1yr
Master_Celestial
Master_CelestialLv4

I loved the idea… the execution not so much.

1yr
sgcn
sgcnLv14

the current path of the book looks good, even though some chapters are average but the overall flow is good so am I enjoying reading this book till now

1yr
papa_mozzarella
papa_mozzarellaLv13

good story the world building is kinda unique

1yr
Related Stories

Black Tech Internet Cafe System

We’ve had systems that help the MCs make pills, steal skills from legendary masters, and even be forced to show off to earn points, but what about a system that allows one to run a virtual reality internet cafe, featuring all the classic games? Our MC awakens in a new world (Truck-kun strikes again) and finds himself with a mysterious system that allows him to run a fully self-sufficient virtual reality internet cafe! What? Opening an internet cafe in a cultivator world? You can now surf the internet, watch dramas, and play video games?! One Emperor Warrior cried after visiting MC’s shop, “Damn, Blizzard completes my life!” Another Yuan River Realm cultivator gasped after drinking Sprite, “What is this sorcery?” What else did the MC bring to the cultivator world? Come join us on this adventure as Fang Qi faces off against cultivation sects and major forces with his collection of modern treasures.

The Leaf That Goes Against Water · Eastern
4.6
944 Chs

Top Tier Providence, Secretly Cultivate for a Thousand Years

Being reincarnated in a cultivation world, Han Jue realizes that he can live his life like a video game. He con reroll his cultivation potential and connate providence. So, he spends 11 years rerolling for a good one... [Unparalleled: Immortal beauty, top-notch charm] [Destined Sword fanatic: Top-notch Sword Dao aptitude, top-notch Sword Dao learning ability] [Unparalleled Movement Technique: Top-notch movement technique aptitude] [Descendant of the Immortal Emperor: You will receive an unparalleled cultivation technique and 1,000 superior-grade spirit stones] In pursuit of longevity, Han Jue decides to cultivate in a low-profile manner. A thousand years later, generations of cultivators have become history. That is when the deities start cleansing the mortal world. Han Jue can no longer hide and must do something about it. Then he realizes, deities and gods aren't that powerful after all!

Let me laugh · Eastern
4.5
1192 Chs

Walker Of The Worlds

Lin Mu was an orphan living in a country town. Having no knowledge of cultivation, he was a common peasant. This was until he discovered a mysterious ring stuck in a tree. Wearing it, a new world opened up to Lin Mu. The world of cultivation! The ring bestowed Lin Mu with the ability to cultivate while also giving him the ability to manipulate space. Snatching treasures, exploring unknown realms, looting secret grottos, everything was possible with the ring. Witness Lin Mu as he learns his purpose in life, finds his destiny, meets impeccable experts and beings. Watch him as he learns the truth of the cosmos, and becomes its saviour! P.S: Rise of the Worm Sovereign is a prequel to this book. Tags: #weak to strong #Beast taming #Beast companions #Monster Master #World Exploration #NO YOUNG MASTERS #NO HAREM ----- Old Synopsis: Lin Mu was a common boy living in a small town, ostracized by the townsmen because of a mistake he made during the harvest, his house seized to compensate for it. Forced to fend for himself in the outskirts, he finds a rusty ring embedded in the tree where he always used to play as a child. Witness his story as the mysterious rusty ring changes his destiny forever, opening him up to a world he would never have experienced, people he would have never met, and powers he would have never had. Instagram: grand_void_daoist -------------------------------------------- -------------------------------------------- Join the discord-https://discord.gg/VfJFxXnbAE

Grand_Void_Daoist · Eastern
4.6
2814 Chs

As a father, I just want to quietly watch you live a long life

Li Che had transmigrated and, after living nineteen ordinary years, he opted to accept his fate, marrying and having children, striving to support his family. But the moment his daughter was born.... Through his daughter, he rose in status, and his life was no longer ordinary. ... With his daughter’s safe birth, you gained a Dao Fruit, "Immortal Artisan". When his daughter turned one, safe and sound, you gained the Dao Fruit "Dragon Elephant Vajra". At his daughter's age of two, free from illness and disaster, he gained a Dao Fruit, "Pure Heart". By the time his daughter was three, lively and clever, he gained a Dao Fruit, "Chess Saint". His daughter was four, five, six years old.... ... Li Che discovered that with each passing year of his daughter’s age, he could condense a Dao Fruit to enhance himself. From then on, Li Che harbored a simple and unpretentious wish. A Dao Fruit a year, quietly safeguarding longevity. As a father, he only wished... Starting from the warmth of his wife and child by the hearth, to peacefully protect his daughter's immortality. Silently condensing countless Dao Fruits. Henceforth cultivating his spirit, invincible between heaven and earth.

Li Hongtian · Eastern
4.1
720 Chs

Complete Martial Arts Attributes

The dimensional rifts link the earth to the Xingwu continent. This is the dawn of the martial arts era! I will be useless if I don't practice martial arts? Don't worry, I have a system that allows me to pick up attributes. When other people drop attributes during their training, I can pick them up secretly. Huh? Did you just say that beating up people will make them drop attributes too? In that case... You defeated a sword skill genius. He dropped Enlightenment×2, Sword Talent×1... You've picked them up. Your insights have improved and you've gained a beginner stage sword talent! You defeated a blade skill talent. He dropped Blade Battle Technique×1, Malicious Blade Intent×1... You picked them up and learned a rare blade battle technique! You've also figured out Malicious Blade Intent and have become extremely fierce! You defeated a physique talent. He dropped Physique Scripture×1, Holy-Blood Dominant Physique×1... You picked them up and learned a new top-grade scripture! You are exceptionally lucky to have received the Holy-Blood Dominant Physique. It can change your physique completely and you earned a god-level title 'Endless Health'. Someone killed a powerful star beast and dropped Spiritual Sight×1 and Blank Attribute×60... You picked them up secretly and receive a spiritual eye talent as well as 60 points to add to any of your current attributes! You defeat many opponents in your life. You accidentally kill an innocent devil and split the universe into two when you're practicing your blade at home. You burst the sun with your fist and the world is engulfed in darkness... That's when you realize... You're invincible!

Don't Enter The Jianghu · Eastern
4.3
3235 Chs

I Can See Through All Things' Information

Reborn into the body of a poor young boy in an unknown village in another world, Lu Qing felt quite helpless. Fortunately, he awakened an ability to see through the information of objects, which gave him a bit of capital to survive. He looked at a weed by the road. [Cow bone grass, average quality, medicinal, highly effective in treating bone injuries.] He looked at a red carp in the river. [Red moon carp, excellent quality, delicious meat, a top-grade nourishing food.] He looked at a wild rabbit in the mountains. [Gray rabbit, ordinary wild rabbit, edible.] ... With his innate ability, Lu Qing gradually established himself in the village, able to survive. Just when he thought he would lead a peaceful life in this ancient world with low productivity, one day, he suddenly saw a figure sweeping across the sky...

King of Salted Fish · Eastern
3.8
431 Chs
Login