The concept of this fanfic is honestly phenomenal, and the execution at the start is a solid 9/10. It is very rare with these characters in another world work well, but the author seamlessly integrated Itachi into the jjk world amazingly. He is also spot on with Itachi's personality and strength, another factor a lot of authors tend to get wrong in fics like these also. Honestly, I would give this a 5/5, but sadly all things come with problems. First off, the formatting is off, spacing is wrong in some places, commas just aren't where they are supposed to be, and sometimes there is just missing punctuation. Although, there is very little grammar mistakes to be seen which is a great thing. Second, the chapters are short, and as a fanfic writer myself who is about to publish, I can tell he writes the chapter then splits them up into shorter lengths to pad the chapter number. The authors plays into webnovels algorithm, but it messes up the stories flow a lot. Lastly, the pace is wierd, I cant really put my finger on it but if you read it I think you will understand what I mean. That's pretty much this fanfic's biggest down fall. If the author gets an editor or friend to help and makes the conversations, scene transtions, and POV switches better this could be one of the best fanfics and definitely the best jjk fanfics out there. Good luck author, hope you continue, and thanks to whoever read this review. Give it a shot.
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LIKEThanks for the detailed review. You’re right about the editing, I’ve been going over the chapters again over the week and working on the punctuations. You’re wrong about the stat padding and gaming WEBNOVEL. I started writing this a couple of months ago. Originally just spat out the chapters as soon as they came to mind. I’m just now working on a real schedule. I know next to nothing about how Webnovel algorithm even works tbfr.
You are right, wrote this at chapter six, but after reading to chapter nine I see you stopped. The first few chapters just seem really short, and honestly chapter 1-3 could be one long chapter. Keep it man don't give up, pace yourself so you don't get writers block.
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romance?