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2024-01-10 21:20

you know your writing is good but the way you write I feel tired sometimes while reading. You put too much emphasis on words which is good but you do it too much . Please make it simple like when characters are talking to each other it will make it more realistic and simple to read . Put the different words when needed or when you like it will make it more enjoyable. BTW your story is good!

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