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ZetronysAuthor1yr
2023-08-05 15:47

Hello, this is my first comment on my novel, I'm going to redo the first 3 chapters, they are in a much lower quality, please don't give up before them

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Just_evilnessLv15

Please tell me there’s no romance

ZetronysAuthor

If you say it in a romantic sense between the MC and someone else, there won't be any, at least I don't plan to

Just_evilness:Please tell me there’s no romance
Just_evilnessLv15

Yes thanks

Zetronys:If you say it in a romantic sense between the MC and someone else, there won't be any, at least I don't plan to
0THeunkown0Lv4

wats mc alignment hero or villian type

ZetronysAuthor

he will not be a hero, the first 100 chapters are the basis of his psychological development, little by little I will make him abandon ethics and morals, so it would be something like an anti hero

0THeunkown0:wats mc alignment hero or villian type
DarkDathLv4

what's this a fanfic of?

ZetronysAuthor

It's not a fanfic /: the story is original

DarkDath:what's this a fanfic of?
DarkDathLv4

oh sorry I was looking though somebody else's reading list titled fanfics

Zetronys:It's not a fanfic /: the story is original
JBFIRE_77Lv4

Zetronys:If you say it in a romantic sense between the MC and someone else, there won't be any, at least I don't plan to
Young_RicanLv14

This book is great, I like how the MC development is going but my honest opinion is if you’re able to go back and edit the small errors in the grammar and add a little more detail to the world-building for example like the settings where the characters are at the moment, I think that would boost this book to a whole new level besides that you’re doing great and can’t wait for more chapters to come out

ZetronysAuthor

Thanks (:

Young_Rican:This book is great, I like how the MC development is going but my honest opinion is if you’re able to go back and edit the small errors in the grammar and add a little more detail to the world-building for example like the settings where the characters are at the moment, I think that would boost this book to a whole new level besides that you’re doing great and can’t wait for more chapters to come out
BLACKQEAZERLv4

Hi outher why you're saying the Mc alignment is anti hero when there is a Villain tag? Thanks.

Zetronys:he will not be a hero, the first 100 chapters are the basis of his psychological development, little by little I will make him abandon ethics and morals, so it would be something like an anti hero
ZetronysAuthor

Hello, I'm doing a psychological in-depth look at the main character, at the beginning he's a typical normal person with a fear of killing and things like that, but as time passes he becomes an anti-hero and finally he will become a villain , but it all depends on your point of view, a villain is someone who harms others or pursues their goals at any cost? kayden will be the second guy

BLACKQEAZER:Hi outher why you're saying the Mc alignment is anti hero when there is a Villain tag? Thanks.
BLACKQEAZERLv4

Okey so he is only pursuing his goal which is ultimate power and it's not blind by mortal things like women,fame,money or things like that?If he has that personality then I hove no worries. At what chapter will he change to become a villain?.

Zetronys:Hello, I'm doing a psychological in-depth look at the main character, at the beginning he's a typical normal person with a fear of killing and things like that, but as time passes he becomes an anti-hero and finally he will become a villain , but it all depends on your point of view, a villain is someone who harms others or pursues their goals at any cost? kayden will be the second guy
ZetronysAuthor

Exactly, Kayden is not going to worry about futile and useless things like women or fame, currently he is in the anti-hero part, I believe it will be at least a hundred more chapters for the second break and he will become a true villain

BLACKQEAZER:Okey so he is only pursuing his goal which is ultimate power and it's not blind by mortal things like women,fame,money or things like that?If he has that personality then I hove no worries. At what chapter will he change to become a villain?.
LouxyLv3

A tip, leave the initials of each word in the title in capital letters.

ZetronysAuthor

Hi, thanks for the comment, I'll do that

Louxy:A tip, leave the initials of each word in the title in capital letters.
SwiftescapeLv15

When? Because I assure you, this novel's attractiveness to a reader is automatically lowered when there's incorrect grammar in its title and Synopsis. Please fix it sooner rather than later if you want more people to give this story a chance.

Zetronys:Hi, thanks for the comment, I'll do that
SwiftescapeLv15

Also please use proper spacing between paragraphs in your synopsis. It's currently one long paragraph that reads improperly. I don't like being a grammer police, but for novels I care a bit about, I have some more criticism for it.

ZetronysAuthor

Thank you, criticism is always welcome, I never notice the spacing of this part, I will change it when I get home from work

Swiftescape:Also please use proper spacing between paragraphs in your synopsis. It's currently one long paragraph that reads improperly. I don't like being a grammer police, but for novels I care a bit about, I have some more criticism for it.
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