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2023-07-30 08:30

Author Review- This is the promised rewrite of my original story. Changes-- Focused on world-building--Characters will feel less one-dimensional--An mc that doesn't make reckless decisions--MC practising magic instead of just fighting people left and right and creating magic of-screen-

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FanFicReader_101
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Is there a LI?

Sam0207
Sam0207Lv4

What's gonna be the update schedule for this?

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Fleur Delacour

FanFicReader_101:Is there a LI?
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Mon-Sat(1 Chapter daily from now on)

Sam0207:What's gonna be the update schedule for this?
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Doctor_Blue
Doctor_BlueLv15

Alright here is my updated review, the rating remains the same.Writing quality was good but in latest chapters there was a need of quick editing, nonetheless, the quality remains the same- stars wise.Story development is where I would like to complain a little bit, and also mix character design with it too- Everything so far is far more realistic and explanatory, the flaw I would say is in, character interaction, it is either not present or very superficial, I would understand the counter to this point, saying our MC was poltician when he died and he is mentally far older than the bunch of kids surrounding him. But the I could counter ask, if he is vying for future minister seat and purging of most of the canceratous people surrounding it, and for this ge need immense support and recognition, so according to story so far he tries to subtly manipulate people around him, in a non harmful way, of course. Then what about when he first arrived inside the train and decided to make friends, because 7 years of trust and friendship would potentially be for lifetime, also, if he wants better manipulation, then what better way to become friends and what better example than Voldy or Dumble.I won't say much about updating stability, I gave it 4 stars due to selfishness as for me a five star is when I can binge read the whole story 😂The world back ground is the only one that got five stars, because, I really love those short interludes and world building, first time saw someone include middle-east asia and Indian subcontinent.Oh one request- If MC pursued Fleur, please make it somewhat mature relationship and pursuing, as he is mentally older and lusting after someone doesn't suit his character.

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