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AstridStorm
AstridStormAuthor1yr
2023-07-18 13:24

Author here!! Just reviewing my own novel:-> I hope you enjoy it. I will try to keep the power scaling in control so that readers dont feel like mc is some god. Also, i would love constructive criticism, so go ahead!

Rebirth of The Dragon Slayer

AstridStorm
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Deadly_Healer
Deadly_HealerLv13

plz write a good synopsis.

1yr
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AstridStorm
AstridStormAuthor

Hey. I made some changes. If you would like to check.

Deadly_Healer:plz write a good synopsis.
1yr
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Deadly_Healer
Deadly_HealerLv13

yeah It's better now looking forward to your story.

AstridStorm:Hey. I made some changes. If you would like to check.
1yr
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Maedreas
MaedreasLv13

mc ends up with none, 1 or more girls?

AstridStorm:Hey. I made some changes. If you would like to check.
1yr
AstridStorm
AstridStormAuthor

There will be romance, but no harem or multiple love interests. if that clears your doubt ^^

Maedreas:mc ends up with none, 1 or more girls?
1yr
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Romance_guy
Romance_guyLv14

AstridStorm:There will be romance, but no harem or multiple love interests. if that clears your doubt ^^
1yr
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Yuki_55
Yuki_55Lv14

some people consider 2 people to not be harem… just asking in case you are one of them, he only has one gf/wife?

AstridStorm:There will be romance, but no harem or multiple love interests. if that clears your doubt ^^
1yr
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AstridStorm
AstridStormAuthor

Right now he has none, and yes only one gf/wife !! more than one is what harem means in my opinion

Yuki_55:some people consider 2 people to not be harem… just asking in case you are one of them, he only has one gf/wife?
1yr
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Ashborn1609
Ashborn1609Lv4

AstridStorm:Right now he has none, and yes only one gf/wife !! more than one is what harem means in my opinion
1yr
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TSUKI
TSUKILv4

Did you stop writing this novel?

1yr
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BrycenBeans
BrycenBeansLv13

Dropped?

1yr
AstridStorm
AstridStormAuthor

No, i have been facing issues in my dominant arm, and i was suffering with some mental health issues due to some events in my life. I am sorry for the break, i will try to get back on track again.

BrycenBeans:Dropped?
1yr
AstridStorm
AstridStormAuthor

Hey! no actually! i replied to a similar comment, but i have issues with my dominant arm, making it tough to work long hours, and handling both writing and uni became difficult, also my university has been really stressful this semester, causing some mental health issues, and i couldnt bring myself to write the chapters, as the chapters just turned very dark and gritty, reflecting my mental state i guess? so i decided to take a break.

TSUKI:Did you stop writing this novel?
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_athena_
_athena_Lv15

If you are looking for fast pace story line look no further. This is honestly a great novel. There are puctuation errors that could be fixed, such as differentiating thoughts and actual speech, especially when 'talking' to the system. But as soon as MC is reincarnated the storyline MOVES and does not stop. There honestly could be more background, but overall, this novel has potential.

1yr

BrycenBeans
BrycenBeansLv13

Solid novel so far I definitely recommend checking it out if you like pure fantasy and reincarnation. looking forward to seeing where this story goes!

1yr
Mi_Mika
Mi_MikaLv13

The story is good, the Punctuation and grammar are meh on the edge of bad and some words are missing and the Author is switching the places of paragraphs sometimes. Read your story more Author because sometimes it is good and sometimes I want believe you had a mini stroke writing some parts.

1yr
CursedRaven
CursedRavenLv13

good story hope author post regular . it can become best novel

1yr
itsBellion
itsBellionLv11

great story n new I must say hope author don't drop this gem

1yr
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