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2023-07-23 22:52

Writing: 8/10, I was pretty surprised at it. There were words used that an average Englishmen wouldn't know such as "piroutted" and the fighting scenes were easily understandable. Tho I gotta rec the author to add some sort of "-----" or "..." as transition.Story: It is fast-paced as fuxk, but pretty well done. I would enjoy it being a bit slower, but it's understandable since this is merely a fanfic for the author to calm down form his other. Updates: Gimmie more!!!The LOTM mechanics are attached pretty good, nothing much to really complain about. But it would be pretty fun for more LOTM stuff to happen, such as maybe the Abraham creating more Beyonders? Idk.

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Indeed, I'm not a native speaker

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