Review Detail of Balling in Along The Path Of Vengeance(Sasuke/Mha)
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(Ch17) The story is sometimes annoying because the mc is made to be as edgy as possible and his personally just a different flavor of Todoroki. Also it sometimes feels like the mc is in his own little world with only him, mina, midoriya and all might sometimes. Like I think we should have some more involvement with other characters, the mc almost never interacts or even thinks about Todoroki even though they are extremely similar. I know he’s not a social person but it feels like a lot of his classmates didn’t exist intill they said a single line during the sports festival. Besides that, it’s pretty good. The fights are nice to read, the story integrates naruto characters in mha without them feeling out of place, (which is an achievement because everytime someone try’s to do that they give them chakra and it sucks) the mc has a backstory that works well, even if it is a bit basic. The romance is cute too.
Along The Path Of Vengeance(Sasuke/Mha)
Maxbonzo
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Balling:I’m not a writer so take my advice with a grain of salt but just have them in the background as supporting characters or somthing, like I assume someone as outgoing as Mina would have a friend group outside of the mc but we would never know that unless you watched the show. Same with Midoriya, Lida is a good friend of his and has some good moments in the show and he’s pretty important too, but he’s just never said much at all which is weird because he hangs out with midoriya a lot. Just have them say somthing from time to time in the background so they actually exist, you don’t really need to focas on them as characters really than just needing them to be there.
Thank you for the review. for Sasuke being edgy I mean... it's Sasuke Uchiha bro, that's his character. He will tone down some eventually though.you're right that I should probably try to integrate some other characters though, suggestions on how are always welcome. It's just that most characters are just irrelevant and don't serve much of any purpose to the overall plot of the story, so I was mostly including the relevant ones. I don't many people want to or care about me giving time to shine for guys like Sero and stuff
I’m not a writer so take my advice with a grain of salt but just have them in the background as supporting characters or somthing, like I assume someone as outgoing as Mina would have a friend group outside of the mc but we would never know that unless you watched the show. Same with Midoriya, Lida is a good friend of his and has some good moments in the show and he’s pretty important too, but he’s just never said much at all which is weird because he hangs out with midoriya a lot. Just have them say somthing from time to time in the background so they actually exist, you don’t really need to focas on them as characters really than just needing them to be there.
Maxbonzo:Thank you for the review. for Sasuke being edgy I mean... it's Sasuke Uchiha bro, that's his character. He will tone down some eventually though.you're right that I should probably try to integrate some other characters though, suggestions on how are always welcome. It's just that most characters are just irrelevant and don't serve much of any purpose to the overall plot of the story, so I was mostly including the relevant ones. I don't many people want to or care about me giving time to shine for guys like Sero and stuff
Yeah, I also just don’t like the personality of the mc but thats not a problem with the story rather than just a preference
Maxbonzo:thank you. is that what holds it back from 5 stars for you?