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TinyBookDragon
TinyBookDragonLv41yr
2023-07-10 09:59

I only have one critique. You describe smiles as "warm" near constantly. Everyone, person or pokemon, gives "warm smiles". Why? Why is that repeated so much that I'm losing my mind every time it appears? There are a variety of ways to describe smiles or even better, they don't need to be mentioned that much in the first place. Loving the story other than that.

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Nuclide
NuclideAuthor

warm smiles for the kind review (noticed it myself, it gets better I promise)

TinyBookDragon
TinyBookDragonLv4

Lol, this made me laugh out loud

Nuclide:warm smiles for the kind review (noticed it myself, it gets better I promise)
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