If I have to be honest I would strongly recommend a rewrite. Author... you don't have a protagonist, but a walking to-do list, he doesn't have personality, emotions, qualities, flaws, nothing. What I see is an empty shell doing quests here and there like a monotonous RPG. What is his philosophy? What are his morals? What is his sense of identity? What does he think of the world? What does he value? I don't know, and I think my fellow readers don't either. It's not necessary to make the protagonist too complex or deep, but you should establish a personality that I can attach to, good or bad, it doesn't really matter, but it should be there! For now he looks like a botched AI roaming the Arrowverse and I don't think that's something to show us, but who knows? To summarize, your character is in dire need of character development!
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LIKEAnd the passing sucks too...
well I'm not gonna force you to stay and read. use your own discretion to stay or get off this train
Bhai atleast uska criticism positively leke apni writing skills improve Karna tha. He wasn't mocking your writing skills or anything in the first place, so why get so triggered? That was kinda rude of you to reply to a genuine criticism like that. You could've atleast been thankful for the free advice. And if you can't even handle honest criticism, then don't bother writing fics and posting them online for people to read and then when they find problems with the way you write and starts critiquing, you start acting like a child who's butthurt and throwing tantrums. BRUH!!
I totally agree with you here. And see my other comment in this thread.
