I liked the idea of ​​the novel, but the chapters are too short, and I hope you don't drop them like the others. Thank you for the story. .

If I have to be honest I would strongly recommend a rewrite. Author... you don't have a protagonist, but a walking to-do list, he doesn't have personality, emotions, qualities, flaws, nothing. What I see is an empty shell doing quests here and there like a monotonous RPG. What is his philosophy? What are his morals? What is his sense of identity? What does he think of the world? What does he value? I don't know, and I think my fellow readers don't either. It's not necessary to make the protagonist too complex or deep, but you should establish a personality that I can attach to, good or bad, it doesn't really matter, but it should be there! For now he looks like a botched AI roaming the Arrowverse and I don't think that's something to show us, but who knows? To summarize, your character is in dire need of character development!

not offensively bad but it's a pretty barebones story, dialogue is pretty awful/non existent. the biggest dialogue chain has been from the TV show and it's structured poorly. all in all seems like wish fulfillment or self insert stuff that will follow the show pretty closely. There are no characters personalities to speak of too btw. Chapters are short and everything moves at lightning speed. To summarise a waste of time. go author hope u get better but feels like u didnt'teven try to figure out how to write well

love this very much, Grammer is good, and story is great, I do hope he gets together with Caitlin and also the main big problem is that the chapters are far to short, and I can't wait for more chapters.

Honestly, chapter and way too short. my review of this fanfiction has more words than the actual fanfiction. it is not fleshed out at all and just seems to be nonsense. i love when new writes come in and give it a go. but this is obviously the guy not even spending ten minutes thinking about it.

this is garbage garbage bj jjjĵjĵjhggggggg

it is a good Story but I need more Chapters![img=recommend]

So far I like it ^^ Would recommend reading it.

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